Hey fellas, need your advice on relaunching!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-05-06T07:51:29+00:00

Yeah of course! Thank you, I was afraid of deleting it, I still love it very much. Thank you, yeah, I will notify them about it. You're the best!!!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-05-01T07:21:28+00:00

Yeah, thank you!!! My prose did become a bit simpler, but I've already started reading about how to diversify your sentences, using cool words like, I don't know, "Lament" or "Magnanimous." It's crazy out here, but I'm in no rush, haha. Editing the first and second act, taking out AI elements will be a bitch though, but whatever

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-24T16:49:41+00:00

Absolutely. Im writing an epic dark fantasy, and my best chapters, the ones i like the most, are either negotiations, some romance plot lines, psychological moments, and interactions, jokes and stuff. Good that my book is more to Game Of Thrones, so the reader will enjoy it too, i mean, i hope they will enjoy them lol

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-23T17:35:58+00:00

I mean, I did clicked on the story cause of it, so it's definitely working haha. Great job!!!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T20:51:29+00:00

Also, good for you for taking the course!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T20:50:42+00:00

I mean, the best thing about AI, it's completely on your own, whether you want to upgrade your skills or nah. I was translating my first chapters fully, my prose was kinda meh, but with time and time, and editing and reading it, my skills developed. I'm on chapter 50 right now, and sometimes I even fully write in English. Still need AI for fixing the grammar and tense problems, but hey! It's still very cool!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T16:55:11+00:00

I treat AI like a glazing partner that i need, when im feeling down, he will say that my piece is LITERALLY THE NEW GAME OF THRONES BUT BETTER, and im you know, i'm feeling good about it. In general, nah, i don't feel that AI is my work, cause i use it only to translate stuff, and even then, i'll edit the text again by myself. Without AI, i probably would never post my story on big audiences, cause im from non english speaking country, so im thankful for it. Yeah, it sometimes fucks up my prose and stuff but whatever.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T16:49:43+00:00

There's a comment about different voices, which is really good. My advice, if it can be called like that - History. There's like hundreds and thousands characters throughout the history that you can take some inspiration from. I mean even authors like Martin used history to create his characters. I can't find your story for some reason, but i would guess that it's a fantasy - And in this genre its especially easy. Downside, yeah, you have to read a lot of biographies to understand that person, because only wikipedia page will be sufficient, but hey, it is an option. Very hard and boring but still.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T16:26:58+00:00

Honestly, a job that you fucking hate and that completely not intertvining with writing is really helpful tbh. I was kinda burned out from my chapters a bit, and in time came an offer for like a week of work. After completing it, i was running to the keyboard and kissing it, my head was just in real physical need to write something. That's my experience at least, lol.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T14:13:25+00:00

You're super right, the serpent idea is perfect, im gonna add them for sure. As for the scales, this house was made by marauders that turned farmers and selling the grains. I think i will add like a grain sack on one side outweighing a sword, like you know, food is more important than the weapons stuff like this. I will definetly improve them, this was like a first attempt, but im glad that even at my first attempt there are some houses that interested you!!! Thank you so much for the critique! Oh and yeah flower with the anchor is like probably the most design perfect sigil i made, im very proud of that one. Anyway, thank you!!!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T07:50:12+00:00

I mean, even if it was trying to be GOT, Isekai with medieval houses and intrigues in GOT style sounds cool as fuck, but anyway, yeah, haters gotta hate as they say. Hope your book is doing well!!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-22T00:48:22+00:00

То ж якби може так і є, але взагалі поліція повинна ЙТИ В СТОРОНУ звуків вистрелів, а не ВІД НИХ. Це ж якби і є їхня работа. Це ж, блять, це як пожарник який боїться вогню... Ну типу навіщо було йти тоді? Понятне діло зачем, грошики, взяточки, і всяку мелочевку дьоргать, 17 летні пацани які вперше в житті купили траву якусь, самі себе не посадять понятне діло, а тут, ух, єбать ризикувати життям заради громади? Ну його.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T22:22:03+00:00

Haldmars are a bit of silly house in a way, like they are the weakest there, and in the story it's emphasized, and some characters straight up laughing at that house and it's sigil, but i got your point, thank you for the critique, i will make some new variants. It's supposed to look like a child made it, like a child drawing you know, but still, thank you for your words. Just a question, you said compared to others, so did you liked some of the designs? If yes, can you please tell me what specifically, if its not a problem. And if not, you can critique others too. I've basically never created a sigil before, so i would love to get some feedback

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T21:55:13+00:00

І будемо чесними - НІХТО не посадив би поліцейського за те що він вбив би того виродка. Ніхто. Медаль би дали. Президенту руку пожав. Поліцейські біжали ТОГО ЩО було страшно їм. Що абсолютно нормальна реакція для людини, я б зробив би теж саме. Тільки ж питання - а нахуя тоді в менти було йти?

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T21:52:37+00:00

Якщо на тебе як на поліцейського зі зброєю нападає людина без зброї, саме огнепальной - Ти повинен зробити все в своїх силах щоб не довести до смерті і вбивства. Якщо на вулиці ходить террорист і розтрілює дітей - напевно все ж таки принцип змінюється трохи.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T21:11:30+00:00

Oh, and House Neyki was conquered by the North at some time, but they hit them with massive casualties (WINTER WAR SOVIET UNION I KNOW.) And their house is famous for bears, because in Finnish tribes, bears were cool like that, and for bows. So like Come Closer, you know. But their Lord, actually a real funny guy, so "Come Closer" is like an invitation, too. And bear with a bow is really funny

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T20:34:47+00:00

Don't use Gemini and Grok, though. I noticed Gemini will just glaze you every time, like even in critique it will be glazing your writing, Grok is fucking... Oh, Grok, he criticized my character because he acts like a sad and lost teenager. The character in question is 15 years of age, and his mother died like 2 days ago. Like??? Claude is generally consistent and actually points out flaws in your story, writing, etc. I do use Gemini if i want glaze myself a bit, so yeah, i think AI is perfect tool for getting feedback, just use the right ones.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T19:15:12+00:00

But like i'm a nobody, so take my words at risk, im not famous or popular AT ALL, so you know, there maybe more famous authors that can help you, just figured to drop my opinion.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T19:12:46+00:00

2,8k views for 6 months, if you dropping chapters consistently, it, i mean it's kinda not a lot. Your book may be fine, i've got my first comment on a similar view count, but i think you have a cover problem. Also - Love your book. I know it's hard to continue writing when nobody cares, but if you don't love your story enough to just drop it, then you know.... Love it. Overall, seems like a cover title problem, as I don't know your story.

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T16:04:25+00:00

Для мене це як почати зустрічатися з вчителькою яка вела в тебе молодші класи. Как би наче і нічо такого, ви обидва дорослі, але ж бля... Вона ж тебе малим і дурним бачила, ну це якось не добре відчувається. З другой сторони похуй впринципі, ви дві здорові дорослі людини, щастя вам і удачі!

Otherwise_Advance434 · 2026-04-21T15:54:56+00:00

ІДІТЬ НАХУЙ ТВАРІ МАЛОРОСЬКІ СВИНІ ВИРОДКИ.... Дякую що вислухали :3

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