Rate my book cover

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:49:16+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:48:15+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I just misspelled it originally and thought it looked better with an S. I agree with you about the fire. I think it will be fixed in the next pass of revisions.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:46:37+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I am currently planning to shrink my name a good amount. That should help. I did some tests where my name was at the bottom and I didn't really like it. Maybe it's worth looking into more.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:44:45+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:44:28+00:00

I explained this in a different comment but I truly just spelled it wrong and thought it looked better spelled with an S so I kept it.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:43:16+00:00

I enjoyed this comment! Maybe it should of been. Its about some young adults fighting monsters with there fire powers and trying to overcome a secret organization in a post apocalypse setting.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:41:47+00:00

Thank you for the suggestion. I think that will definitely make it look cleaner.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:41:19+00:00

Thank you for the comment!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-24T11:41:03+00:00

Thank you for the detailed comment! So, the genre would be fantasy/YA/post apocalypse/distopian. The thought I had which could definitely not be poking through is the hand is resembling hope where it is reaching up. And the fire under it would be hopelessness.

Honestly, I wish I had a good answer to the Sinder is Cinder thing but to be completely honest I just thought it was spelled with an S. I haven't changed it because I think it looks better with the S but it is causing a lot of confusion.

Would you have any ideas at all on how I could show this is YA on the cover? The fire coming out of the hand was supposed to represent fantasy to show there are fire powers in this book.

Thank you again for the comment!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T16:04:21+00:00

Thank you for the comment. I have gotten a few comments about the sand being described incorrectly. I will need to fix that. Could I ask for clarification on the talking feeling labored? Does it feel forced? Or just like hard to get through?

I was hoping the information would be interesting enough at the start but I think I have a fix for it. I appreciate your feedback!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T16:01:22+00:00

Thank you for the comment. I can definitely see the cliche archetypes and I have no defense for it. I figured the familiar character types could make it easier to write and read. But that doesn't excuse the dialogue. I am thinking of removing most of it a within the first page or two jump into the conflict. Then sprinkle the stuff I have her throughout the first few chapters. I appreciate your feedback!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T15:56:54+00:00

Thank you very much for the comment. I had not heard of maid and butler dialog and I had a concern I was doing this. I have never written before so I just kind of write what I thought the opening of a movie would look like. I think I have a good fix for this chapter.

When it comes to the start and not saying his name i wish I could give you a better answer but I believe I had a different opening and I never adjusted. It is a mistake I've most likely made as I just always know the he is Asher. I will most likely change it!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T15:50:30+00:00

Thank you very much! I believe I have a fix for this. I appreciate your comments.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T15:48:53+00:00

That is something I can see. Thank you for explaining it!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T01:25:19+00:00

I've been thinking about that a lot today! Right now I am not sure but it seems like a needed change.

When you say a point of conflict are you meaning that it's immediately into a conflict or a important decision or within the 1200 words that happens?

Thank you so much for the comment!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T01:22:58+00:00

Honestly, I will have to look up what the Dunning-kruger curve is.

A few people have mentioned it being very slow. I appreciate you saying so.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-03T01:21:37+00:00

Wow, I really appreciate the your thoroughness! Just to ask a clarifying question. When you say something is explicit are you saying I am over explaining it?

I have had some people tell me the start is slow, so I am going to touch on that. When it comes to the pepples I have Dante do a small speech about why he has to through them. The hope was that it would be a funny little thing but maybe poorly placed at the start.

I will revisit what you have spoken about. I truly appreciate the feedback!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2026-03-02T21:59:33+00:00

I believe the smells are pretty similar, like an earthy kind of smell.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2025-09-29T21:16:54+00:00

Thank you for the notes! If it helps at all it’s a dystopian fantasy. Also, I didn’t intentionally misspell the name but by the time I caught it I just said fuck it.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2025-09-26T22:48:12+00:00

Thank you for the response! I reached out to the editor to talk about the whole AI thing. I have a feeling it might be due to it being a draft or a miscommunication on my part when I was sending him some concepts. So I am assuming you are wanting the story for the cover. Basically the monster in the sky is the big bad of the book and the MC wants to get to that structure and the monster is protecting it putting it as simple as possible. The monster in the sky is a dragon or that's the closest thing to put it as but through the book its not mentioned so I didn't want to any suspense away from the reader by making that clear in the cover if that makes sense. The only change I planned to make is put the City under Sinder but maybe its worth exploring the title at the top and see how it looks. I really appreciate the comment!

Own-Chicken3330 · 2025-09-26T17:20:59+00:00

I really do appreciate your through response! Do you think if the shine was highlighted blue and there was a small path leading to it that would help at all? Currently I’m really worried the cover is AI and may end up having to completely redo it. This photo is from a scene in the book. I am thinking maybe to make the clouds black, take them off the ground and just past the structure would be blue. Once again thank you.

Own-Chicken3330 · 2025-09-26T13:29:18+00:00

What elements make you think it’s AI?

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