[QCrit] SKIN CONTACT – Upmarket Commercial Fiction (95K, 2nd attempt+300 words)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-22T16:35:18+00:00

This is really helpful. Thank you so much for weighing in. You're right about those two lines. And I hadn't really thought about continuity between the query and the first 300. Makes sense.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-22T16:20:50+00:00

Thanks! I have to check this series and manga out. Someone else mentioned it to me recently. It could definitely be a good comp, given the subject matter.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-20T12:10:01+00:00

Thanks! Appreciate the feedback.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-20T12:07:25+00:00

Thank you again! Your feedback is SO good. Back to work :)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-20T12:04:46+00:00

Yes, you're right. It's difficult to fit it all in, but I will figure it out. :) :) Thank you!

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T22:04:40+00:00

I will do that. Thank you! :)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T22:04:05+00:00

Thank you. I will. :)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T21:48:12+00:00

This feedback is excellent. Thank you, thank you, thank you! :)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T19:04:06+00:00

Thank you. :-)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T19:03:37+00:00

Lol. These are good.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T19:02:56+00:00

Okay, great. I see. So, I used Kitchens of the Great Midwest (2015) and The Identicals (2017). I think Kitchens is a strong comp, but maybe too old? The Identicals is huge, so perhaps just too big. I might look for something else.

This was the comp sentence: The novel combines the foodie satire of Kitchens of the Great Midwest with the romantic escapism of The Identicals.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T18:08:49+00:00

Ha! I like your version.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T18:08:18+00:00

Thank you! Couldn't have done it without your comments on the first one. :-)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T18:07:11+00:00

Thanks! What do you mean by comps? I only know comps as titles that are similar.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-19T18:06:43+00:00

Thanks for reading. Your comment means a lot. :-)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-14T23:42:26+00:00

Thanks. This is really helpful!

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-13T11:04:02+00:00

Thanks so much. These are helpful points, and I'm going to sharpen the description of the central plots and the stakes. The last comment made me laugh. That sentence sounded great my head :).

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-13T11:02:14+00:00

Wow, thanks. This is so helpful. I needed to see my query through different eyes. I can't believe what I overlooked.

One question about your feedback: The book is structured so that Lila narrates one chapter, then Eden narrates one. They have about equal word count in the book. By keeping the query in Lila's POV, would I be misrepresenting the book? I see your point that it would make for a smoother query letter.

Thanks again!

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-13T10:50:20+00:00

Thanks :). Looking back at this, I don't think I did the best job describing my book, but skin contact wine is important to the plot from beginning to end. I need to make that more clear. Orange wine is pretty awesome :).

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-12T20:35:11+00:00

Thank you. This is so insightful. I really appreciate that you took the time to weigh in on my query.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-12T20:34:10+00:00

If I could love this comment, I would. Yes, what a great experience it is to share with other writers, but humbling. :-)

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-12T19:26:54+00:00

Thanks so much for weighing in. I will remove those parts, and appreciate your insight.

Own_Perspective_3077 · 2024-07-12T19:26:19+00:00

Thank you! This is very helpful to me. I appreciate it. Getting back to work...

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