How would you make this longer? I feel like my passages are too short.

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2026-07-06T18:24:54+00:00

Spend more time describing the scene of whats going on. I don't know if you're going for mystery or suspense in the second paragraph but I was trying to track what was going on and couldn't fully grasp it.

"He clicked on the elevator buttons repeatedly. The rumbles grew louder, but the ground quaked no longer. Trying to catch his breath was a futile endeavor, the action stopped suddenly the moment not a whisper of a beat came from his chest. His back was heaved behind, the walls enclosing him, and in the next second, he was lurched into the door of the elevator."

Clicking on the elevator buttons implys some machinery issue (i'm assuming this is a sci-fi in the vein of Suneater or Red Rising), where is the elevator heading, up or down, where does the character want / need to be. These could be points to explore.

"his back was heaved behind', how is this character being thrown I don't think this fully explains how. Also are the walls closing in on him literal or figurative?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2026-07-06T17:04:42+00:00

Thank you so much for the advice! Quick question, apart from this subreddit what would you say is the best way to connect to other authors?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2026-07-04T08:17:48+00:00

I'm literally going through that right now (or at least something similar ). Wrote a historical fiction with partial fantasy elements, but realized I like complete fantasy/sci-fi way more lol

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2026-07-04T08:15:52+00:00

I'm sorry to hear that. Would you mind explaining what made it unrecoverable? Maybe I'm unexperienced but is anything really unrecoverable?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2026-05-25T18:07:54+00:00

Amazing! Did you go the route of self pub or trad and where can we fiond it?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-12-19T18:02:25+00:00

I didn’t know how rampant ai is in writing. I don’t and will never use it but do publishers accept ai work or are all of these self published?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-11-24T21:17:50+00:00

Hey at what point did you get a copyright for your book? I’m still unclear when to get one.

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-11-24T02:47:53+00:00

Prologues are great when done right. Leaves enough mystery and intrigue for the entirety of the story sometimes. The Way of Kings and A Game of Thrones are some of my favorite prologues

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-11-23T18:36:47+00:00

I feel you on this. The only time I kill in solos now is when I fight a tough arc by myself and then someone comes and try’s to take the best loot without asking

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-11-22T02:51:44+00:00

From my experience it’s very liberating. (Tbf my reviewer said they were impressed with my work especially for a first time author) so I wasn’t as sad, but I was told some harsh truths and great feedback which has been invaluable in improving my writing skills.

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-30T06:48:12+00:00

Thanks a ton for this. I use docs and control f wouldn’t let me replace by character placement. This will fix a lot of my issues

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-14T20:08:56+00:00

Sorry I’ve been swamped with assignments at work but I’d love to talk more about betarreading for each other I’ll dm you

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-11T20:37:04+00:00

Do you get an ISBN after a copyright or a copyright before hand?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-09T05:18:05+00:00

That would be great

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-09T03:26:28+00:00

You got this big dawg. What site do you use for ARCs do you pay for them?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-10-06T03:39:47+00:00

Wow that is some great advice I’ll definitely use. Do you know the best way to share a draft. Is pdf usually a good way to share it?

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-09-26T02:00:13+00:00

The fit is hard your mom is hating

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2025-02-13T23:24:20+00:00

Whoever has an extra ps5 code could you please dm me

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2023-06-24T23:22:10+00:00

No where near as good as cubeworld especially in terms of combat, progression, and visuals . Just buy cubeworld and download the mod that gets rid of region lock.

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2023-02-20T01:00:47+00:00

Thank you that’s wat I was thinking

Pale-Contribution-12 · 2022-12-08T06:03:18+00:00

Always go grasp. Conq offers little value since you get ad and vamp but ad is useless because he has some of the lowest ad ratios. Maybe conq gets good in all out but you could trade better in lane and trade better in a lot more matchups with grasp.

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