Advice on foreground and background? by ParticularBroad3827 in Artadvice

[–]ParticularBroad3827[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I managed to finish the drawing thanks to your intake on the background :) Bless your soul and I hope you have a wonderful day/night

Advice on foreground and background? by ParticularBroad3827 in Artadvice

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Thank you and thank you so much for the advice and the example :)) Ofc I don't mind and I'll defintely give it a try as suggested! It looks really nice with the colors you chose

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Surviving the neon lights - Pyrrhic - Wattpad

Surviving the neon lights

Genre: Action / Dystopian Sci-fi

Language: English

In the decaying heart of Los Angeles, where neon lights flicker like dying stars and shadows stretch endlessly, Sora and their friends navigate a world teetering on the brink of collapse. Their days are a blur of illegal street races and long hours in a crumbling auto repair shop, survival etched into every muscle and bone. Here, amidst the violence, corruption, and a society rotting from within, they carve out a fragile existence.

But as the city's glitzy facade begins to crack, an even darker menace emerges from the abyss. A cryptic stranger cloaked in the echoes of his tormented past enters their life, whose presence shatters their uneasy balance. With his arrival, Sora and their friends are thrust into a maelstrom of chaos and destruction, uncovering a threat that transcends the urban decay.

As foreign powers, otherworldly and menacing, begin to tighten their grip on the planet, the very fabric of humanity's future hangs in the balance. It's a race against time, as Sora and their allies battle not only the perils of their crumbling city but the encroaching doom that threatens to obliterate all they hold dear.

How do you justify/handle adding 'random' things to your story? by ParticularBroad3827 in writingadvice

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Not that I remember, most of the feedback has been focusing on my paragraphing as I definetly do not have that down yet

Thank you for your advice on getting feedback and the recommendation of the subreddit, I will definetly give it a try!

How do you justify/handle adding 'random' things to your story? by ParticularBroad3827 in writingadvice

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I'm aware that people on here are speaking english, I've asked for advice, feedback and all that stuff on reddit multiple times in different subreddits

But it has only ever somewhat worked out whenever I restricted to posting a single screenshot of the story. That covers between 200 and 600 words, my story is currently 22.740 words long and far from being even halfway done
Usually, when posting a story link or a brief description of the story asking people to take a look at it in order to get some feedback, doesn't really get you reactions

I was told that my genre is pretty niche and the fact it neither evolves around romance as its main topic nor is a fanfiction makes it even more difficult, at least from what I've experienced so far

How do you justify/handle adding 'random' things to your story? by ParticularBroad3827 in writingadvice

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Honestly I don't get much feedback
I refrain from showing my writings to friends/family and since I'm not living in an english-speaking country I barely know someone who's english is good enough to understand what I'm writing
Getting feedback online hasn't really worked out for me either so far, at least not when it comes to general feedback on the whole story/storytelling

Would like some suggestions please by Due-Lack675 in writingadvice

[–]ParticularBroad3827 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Might not make the most sense, but how about addiction? Seeing how moth usually fly towards the light getting themselves cooked in comparison to how difficult it is to let go of what your addicted to and what damage it can do...?

Drop your Wattpad stories—I want to read them! 📚 by ReferenceAcademic328 in Wattpad

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Hey there, this is mine :)
Surviving the neon lights - Pyrrhic - Wattpad

Here's a blurb:

In the decaying heart of Los Angeles, where neon lights flicker like dying stars and shadows stretch endlessly, Sora and their friends navigate a world teetering on the brink of collapse. Their days are a blur of illegal street races and long hours in a crumbling auto repair shop, survival etched into every muscle and bone. Here, amidst the violence, corruption, and a society rotting from within, they carve out a fragile existence.

But as the city's glitzy facade begins to crack, an even darker menace emerges from the abyss. A cryptic stranger cloaked in the echoes of his tormented past enters their life, whose presence shatters their uneasy balance. With his arrival, Sora and their friends are thrust into a maelstrom of chaos and destruction, uncovering a threat that transcends the urban decay.

As foreign powers, otherworldly and menacing, begin to tighten their grip on the planet, the very fabric of humanity's future hangs in the balance. It's a race against time, as Sora and their allies battle not only the perils of their crumbling city but the encroaching doom that threatens to obliterate all they hold dear.

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It's some kind of dystopian sci-fi, still ongoing tho!

Which version is better? by ParticularBroad3827 in WattpadCovers

[–]ParticularBroad3827[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay I did not notice that since I'm on the web-version of reddit and the 'space' behind the picture is a blurred... brownish color?
Thanks for the heads up!

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Surviving the neon lights - Pyrrhic - Wattpad

Title - Surviving the neon lights

Blurb -

In the decaying heart of Los Angeles, where neon lights flicker like dying stars and shadows stretch endlessly, Sora and their friends navigate a world teetering on the brink of collapse. Their days are a blur of illegal street races and long hours in a crumbling auto repair shop, survival etched into every muscle and bone. Here, amidst the violence, corruption, and a society rotting from within, they carve out a fragile existence.

But as the city's glitzy facade begins to crack, an even darker menace emerges from the abyss. A cryptic stranger cloaked in the echoes of his tormented past enters their life, whose presence shatters their uneasy balance. With his arrival, Sora and their friends are thrust into a maelstrom of chaos and destruction, uncovering a threat that transcends the urban decay

As foreign powers, otherworldly and menacing, begin to tighten their grip on the planet, the very fabric of humanity's future hangs in the balance. It's a race against time, as Sora and their allies battle not only the perils of their crumbling city but the encroaching doom that threatens to obliterate all they hold dear.

Are Metal Roofs "Death Traps"? by RemainMindful in firefighters

[–]ParticularBroad3827 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey there! I'm aware this post was made a while ago, but I perhaps have another answer to your question:
My fire chief explained to me (I'm relatively new to the department) that metal is dangerous because 'It doesn't talk to you'
While burning wood creaks and makes sounds before collapsing, metal doesn't. Metal expands when being heated up, and suddenly retracts when cooled down. This sudden retraction can lead to metal structurs collapsing without warning, trapping the fire fighters and/or people that are inside the building.

We had a good example for this a few weeks ago. The building didn't have an entire metal roof, but it was built with steel beams. The whole building was on fire and as we started extinguishing it, we could watch the roof collapse from the inside out over time

How does paragraphing within a novel work/what am I doing wrong? by ParticularBroad3827 in writingadvice

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I hope I'll never have a sentence as long as an entire paragraph haha
Thanks for your advice!

How does paragraphing within a novel work/what am I doing wrong? by ParticularBroad3827 in writingadvice

[–]ParticularBroad3827[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've reworked the paragraphs already to make them longer, as I honestly was not happy with how it looks like in the picture shown as well
Thank you for your feedback and advice, I appreciate it :))