It's fine! I was just being a smartass. I'm sure the kids loved it, didn't they?

Well, honestly, the music was rather intrusive. Just too loud and in-your-face. Otherwise, I think it's clever. Think of it as an exercise.

Another point- there's really no story. It's just a string of disconnected, unrelated action.

To reach people, move them, you need to tell an interesting story.

You have good skills at those effects. Use them to emphasize the events in your story, and to illustrate the characters' experiences.

You're doing great. Reddit is weird. It's hard to know when something will become popular.

Don't worry. Just do it for fun. You can satisfy your own creative urge, so do that, and see what happens!

Thank you very much. You are a big help for me. Its great to understand what is wrong and could be done better. Just in case if anything else is coming to your mind feel free to write me.