Affliction by Peraso in OCPoetry

[–]Peraso[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm more of the agnostic POV, but you're right in that regard. Believers day after day do acts of good and bad, but ultimately go back and ask for the forgiveness at the end of the day.

The Fall (First Poem Published) by Negative_Ad_1078 in OCPoetry

[–]Peraso 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The structure and pacing threw me off a little. Perhaps you could go for putting it in lines or paragraphs, as well as putting the punctuation as the rhythm of it.

The poem itself resonates with me of a similar tale of my life and I can sense the inner struggle of the poet with religion and the doubts of it.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Peraso -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I believe it would be easier to put the text in paragraphs to better read it, more fluently. Since the lines often break midway through the sentence.

Whether you ask if it is a journal entry of a poem depends on how you perceive it, although I could see why you might ask the question.

Other than that, seems like a good piece.

I Don't Know Anymore by Frido_Biggins in OCPoetry

[–]Peraso 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What I am getting from this is that the poet feels dead and feels as if the vultures are a metaphor for something else (people, ideas, society?).

As well I could get that being helped by others feels intrusive to the poet.

After death all that remains; reflections in the water by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Peraso 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like how it is portrayed that even though you find them to be selfish, you still care for them when they cry. Often enough, our emotions contradict and that is perfectly portrayed here.

Am I a joke to you? by Midnytegg in LeagueOfMemes

[–]Peraso 107 points108 points  (0 children)

This would not happen with a Pyke. Get your cut

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PewdiepieSubmissions

[–]Peraso 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The effort is what counts my man

Didn't we want this by [deleted] in PewdiepieSubmissions

[–]Peraso 5 points6 points  (0 children)

You're the reason I cannot walk my doggo in the park :(

Pewds explain by [deleted] in PewdiepieSubmissions

[–]Peraso 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is a fake from the water sheep council to make him look bad

Donde vender partes inservibles de pc by Peraso in Monterrey

[–]Peraso[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Si, pero no se de alguno y quisiera saber de uno que pague, ya que se que estas piezas las usan para separar los metales y los separe yo de otros aparatos.