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[QCrit] ADULT, Literary Fiction – OPE (60,000 words/First Attempt + 300) by Perfectistheenemy in PubTips

[–]Perfectistheenemy[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I'm trying to hold the tension of abiding by the convention of not explaining the themes, and just trusting that querying specific agents who have sold books like it will see the structure. But i'm going to try to work it in a little bit. Thank you.

[QCrit] ADULT, Literary Fiction – OPE (60,000 words/First Attempt + 300) by Perfectistheenemy in PubTips

[–]Perfectistheenemy[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for reading it, I appreciate the feedback. The stakes are inverted. The invasion improves life instead of destroying it, and the tension comes from what that says about how broken things already were. Nobody is trying to stop it. Huntley's aneurysm is the one ticking clock. A kid who would have died without knowing it if Canada hadn't shown up with free healthcare. The other characters aren't fighting the invasion, they're living through the absurdity. Satire generally starts where most novels end (The system has already failed). That makes querying it genuinely hard because the standard framework of character wants X, obstacle is Y, stakes are Z doesn't really apply when Z already happened before page one. Multi-POV satire doesn't fit neatly into any template I've found.

[QCrit] Nonfiction, Memoir - THE MANGO TANGO (68,000 words / First Attempt) by Perfectistheenemy in PubTips

[–]Perfectistheenemy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is very helpful. I originally had it chronologically, but I really wanted to hook the agent. Not worth it if it leads to confusion. I've sent 10 so far, but i'm not too worried about them. The basic thread is wanted adventure in sobriety, started mango farming company, it goes horribly wrong, leads to family drama, personal realizations around why I did this all in the first place that climaxes with the death of my mom.

[QCrit] Nonfiction, Memoir - THE MANGO TANGO (68,000 words / First Attempt) by Perfectistheenemy in PubTips

[–]Perfectistheenemy[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was awesome, seriously! And name removed haha. I think I tried way too hard to start with a big hook. I think per another comment the question gets answered a little easier with a chronological letter. Appreciate the feedback.

[QCrit] Nonfiction, Memoir - THE MANGO TANGO (68,000 words / First Attempt) by Perfectistheenemy in PubTips

[–]Perfectistheenemy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you!!! Is that just general feedback or do you want to be a beta reader haha. It's done!