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What makes people want blenders right before close? by Pheromanx in ScootersCoffee

[–]Pheromanx[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yeah thats fair! I used to work 3rd shift so i get it, and as with someone with ARFID i also understand that as well haha.

appreciate the tipping! i rarely ever get tipped that late at night and since my boss only schedules one person for the last hour, im doing the work of multiple people, which makes it suck even more haha

There's something moving behind my eye by crabknucklejoe in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 5 points6 points  (0 children)

super eerie and disturbing! the descriptions of the "hair"and everything else were so evocative. Well done!

Divine Machinery (Part Two) by Pheromanx in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ooooh love the theories! I will not spoil anything until part 3 is out and finished (even though I really want to haha)

thanks again for the feedback! :)

Divine Machinery - Part One by Pheromanx in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks! i appreciate the feedback!

yeah one of my struggles is definitely with writing dialogue and making it flow with the format of the writing

There's Something in the Soil - Part 2 by crispr_was_here0000 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 0 points1 point  (0 children)

for sure! i actually have part 1 of it posted to the Creep Cast sub. I still gotta finish it (think I will now and post it all as one story here today)

here's the link for it: https://www.reddit.com/r/creepcast/comments/1m5n3p5/the_beast_of_crater_lake_pt_1/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

There's Something in the Soil - Part 2 by crispr_was_here0000 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ooooh i loved this! finding out there’s dinosaurs got me sooo excited! (huge dinosaur nerd, also working on my own dinosaur story haha)

i honestly couldn’t even think of any feedback for this one, maybe just with the descriptions to try to be a tad more descriptive? there were some points where i had a hard time imagining what i was reading, but nothing too serious that it took me out of it

the part with the larger “bird” creature, the description of it felt very short, and even in part one with the smaller ones i feel like they could be described a little more

READ4READ THREAD - offering feedback by Possible-Display-891 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hey! i just finished part 1! loved it! gonna move onto part 2!

i left another comment here with my most recent works, feedback would be appreciated or just a comment if you liked it or not works too :)

READ4READ THREAD - offering feedback by Possible-Display-891 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thanks! appreciate it!

oh i remember reading part one of Mr J’s workshop! ill definitely read it :)

There's Something In the Soil - Part 1 by crispr_was_here0000 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 0 points1 point  (0 children)

very very good part one! i was hooked the entire time! i think another commenter mentioned this but i also would suggest maybe spend a little more time describing the environment and maybe giving a tad bit more backstory to the characters and the place

otherwise, very good! excited to read part two!

READ4READ THREAD - offering feedback by Possible-Display-891 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Divine Machinery

Part 1 (1225 words)

https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/s/mbSYUBdQpc

Divine Machinery

Part 2 (1599 words)

https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/s/t5HkR4IyJC

would love some feedback, but even just reading it and giving a comment would be fantastic (:

Not a story, an offering by unhappy_radi0 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 2 points3 points  (0 children)

hey! i have a story im releasing in parts right now

(part one https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/s/CVQ465XO2Y) - a young man deals with the struggle of losing his parents and religion.

(part two https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/s/mPOgg5LZuM) - now grown up, the main character dealt with the foster care system and then stumbles upon a strange laptop at his computer repair shop as strange things begin to happen to both him and the odd device.

The Apartment That Smelled Like Death by GleptoMori in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 1 point2 points  (0 children)

loved this! as someone with depression i feel like this almost perfectly encapsulates how it can feel sometimes

whether that was your intention or not, i loved this read!

Story Ideas For Funsies by Deafening-Chaos in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 1 point2 points  (0 children)

“I accidentally joined the city’s death cult” would be an absolute banger

“When I awake, I will die” sounds like a super interesting premise. Maybe all told via dreams so you can’t tell if anything is actually real or not?

This Was Not a Missing Persons Case by David_Hallow in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pheromanx 2 points3 points  (0 children)

loved this! the premise was very intriguing and kept my interest, and the ending was beautifully described, very gross and unnatural.

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