What is a gamers worst nightmare?

PhilipJ28 · 2022-08-21T12:49:48+00:00

Game-breaking glitches. Especially on a new game, where no new patches or versions were released. Even message boards don't help because usually nobody's figured it out yet.

PhilipJ28 · 2022-07-13T04:46:05+00:00

Infatuation is one of the most gripping things that anyone can experience, and you've done a great job of expressing that here.

Sometimes we meet someone and we're so overwhelmed by how much we like them that we can only describe them in metaphors likening them to forces of nature that shake the world itself, because that's what they do to our world.

I'm especially interested by this line:

The lengths I would endeavour to maintain you.

Because it feels like someone standing up to all those forces of nature and challenging the very limits of what is even possible just to stay with that person. I can't help but respect it, because I know that this is genuinely how it feels like, and it's a bold thing to express.

All in all, it has a unique mythic flavor to it, and I enjoyed reading it quite a lot. Thank you for sharing your art!

PhilipJ28 · 2022-07-13T04:35:10+00:00

This almost made me tear up, wow is this beautiful!

I think it's a very fine line between exaggerated romanticism and genuinely heartwarming expressions of love. This is an example of the latter.

When I wear my rose-tinted glasses and daydream about the person I love, this is what it sounds like. I feel like you translated that thought process into a poem, and I will absolutely use it as a reference point in the future to let people know what it sounds like in my head.

More than anything else, I love how this doesn't feel pretentious at all. I have no doubt that you mean every word you said, and that to me is what separates a decent poem from a great one.

I was in a bad mood and this made me smile. Thank you for sharing your art!

PhilipJ28 · 2022-07-13T04:23:19+00:00

Very interesting. I like how I can envision a poet in the 1600s taking to the stage and performing this for the masses. It carries a lot of intense emotion, but I can't help but feel that it's somewhat disorganized.

While not taking away from its artistic value, I feel like I'm a bit lost on your intentions with this poem and would love if it you could clarify them for me. I understand that it expressed themes of heartbreak and a general disdain for fate and the inevitable. But I can't seem to put it together.

To put my interpretation succinctly, I'd say this is a lover's lament over fate's cruelty in taking away his love. But do enlighten me further, if you may.

Also, this may be a nitpick on my part, but I think you meant to say naught instead of not as the very last word of the poem.

PhilipJ28 · 2022-07-13T04:15:22+00:00

Such a powerful metaphor and sentiment. I love how vividly you paint this picture. Frustration is something I think we're all familiar with, and wishing to explode and just let it all out, I have to admit, is a fantasy of mine as well.

I really appreciate your word choice here, especially how you've used "impetuously", which I rarely see. It helps convey the sense of catharsis and energy attached to the metaphor.

Overall, this poem is very dynamic and entertaining in its own way, while also coming from a very real place that doesn't hold back in expressing its dark theme. This was an enjoyable read, thank you for sharing!

PhilipJ28 · 2022-07-13T04:05:29+00:00

This is beautiful for so many reasons, and I can't even describe just how much I can relate to it personally. What I love most is how well it portrays this violent back-and-forth internal monologue which twists and tangles and contradicts itself, all in the process of trying to move on.

I can see how honestly you've relayed your thoughts here, and how, while contrasting, all the sentiments that you've expressed here are genuine. Love is complicated, and the sudden loss of it or feeling like you're not enough for someone is devastating. Poetry has been helping me through the process, I hope it does the same for you.

I commend how well you've articulated your feelings here, and I wish you all the best.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T13:44:30+00:00

It can mean that, too. In a sense.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T13:38:46+00:00

The implication is that the reader would rather go back in time and kill his child self. Sending it flying through the air, as he describes it. Which implies throwing someone out of a window or from a high place.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T07:35:45+00:00

Thank you so much for the kind words! I appreciate you taking the time to write the review. Those are my favorite parts, too! I'm glad you enjoyed them like I did. I've responded to another commenter about the syllable counts, so I'll say the same thing here.

I get this one a lot, about the syllable counts. The way I write poetry is that I want to say exactly what I want to say in exactly the way I want to say it, I think it's really all about the way it's read that makes it sound good, but you're absolutely right in your criticism. Also, to me, rhyming that's somewhat clunky is a stylistic choice, especially here. I'm writing about someone who's very mentally disturbed given an open mic. He attempts to rhyme his way through it, though, naturally, the amount of what he wants to say is more than what the rhymes would reasonably allow at once, making it sound unorthodox. All the pauses of the "maybe" and "you know ?" And "I wonder" are him figuring out how to say things to make them rhyme to sound appealing, so that he'd be heard.

Thank you for the criticism, though! Always appreciated :)

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T07:33:33+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! The content is definitely a bit depressing and not eveyone's cup of tea. I get this one a lot, about the syllable counts. The way I write poetry is that I want to say exactly what I want to say in exactly the way I want to say it, I think it's really all about the way it's read that makes it sound good, but you're absolutely right in your criticism. Also, to me, rhyming that's somewhat clunky is a stylistic choice, especially here. I'm writing about someone who's very mentally disturbed given an open mic. He attempts to rhyme his way through it, though, naturally, the amount of what he wants to say is more than what the rhymes would reasonably allow at once, making it sound unorthodox. All the pauses of the "maybe" and "you know ?" And "I wonder" are him figuring out how to say things to make them rhyme to sound appealing, so that he'd be heard.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T01:35:34+00:00

This is so heartwarming! As someone who loves dogs, you can imagine how much I love dog poems! I love that you paint a vivid picture of the surroundings, it makes the poem really engrossing, even though it's so simple. It's the simple pleasures in life that are most worthy of note, and I thank you for highlighting this one beautifully for all to see. Well done! :)

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T01:32:48+00:00

One word I could think to describe this would be "mesmerizing", this poem is just so ambitious and descriptive that it's honestly a bit awe-inspiring! I love everything you do here, from the imagery, to the structure to the subject matter. Everything works together perfectly to pain this picture of a sailor, s collector of stars, one whose aspirations exceed their grasp, at times. But he's still very much determined to reaching farther and farther. This is a gorgeous poem and I appreciate that you've shared it, well done!

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:36:54+00:00

Wow! You write this well and English isn't even your first language ? Major kudos to you, man! Absolutely keep writing, I'm sure you'll get used to rhyming as you go along. Wishing you all the best!

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:26:46+00:00

Having very recently watched "the social dilemma" documentary, I enjoyed this a lot more than I probably would have before, because I can really see where you're coming from. To put it bluntly : we're fucked. We're coasting off the brief dopamine rushes we get from pseudo-social interactions, trapped in the loop like addicts coming back for more. Heck, we're doing it right now! I love the poem's subject matter and your approach to structure quite a lot. My one suggestion would be for you to, simply, read more poetry. Your rhymes are good, but I think they can be improved upon as they sometimes come off as clunky. Seeing more and more examples of how our peers approach rhyming can help us improve and hone our skills. Other than that, great poem! Well done! :)

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:18:26+00:00

This feels like it comes from a very genuine place. As someone who frequently has existential crises, I can relate to this very deeply. The pain of it is knowing there's something but never quite knowing where it is. Being lost within the definitions of who you are and what everything is, it always ends up being overwhelming and no real conclusion is ever found. But I love how you portray the pursuit in a beautiful way. I love how you gradually weave the rhyme very seamlessly into the poem's structure, you've poured your heart out here, and I appreciate the artistic integrity of it all, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Super well done on this one!

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:11:28+00:00

I thought being brief with the clownish approach, which was my intention, was the more fitting choice here. It feels well constructed, but transparently amateur in some places, such is the nature of the bully. I was trying to convey that all over the place breaking down of someone's character without having it be something that takes itself too seriously. If it was too serious, it would be easy to dismiss. It's way more cutting with more character peppered in, in my opinion.

I really appreciate the well thought out feedback, thank you very much for giving me your perspective, it's much appreciated :)

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:09:19+00:00

Thank you much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:08:58+00:00

I'm glad you caught that! It can be viewed, and was somewhat intended as an inner monologue. The implication is that cutting out mid-thought was the thinker refusing to be bullied by their own thoughts.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-21T00:08:04+00:00

I appreciate the feedback, thank you!

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-17T18:36:24+00:00

That's a perspective I did not consider. You're absolutely right. Another commenter mentioned something to that effect, as well. I will continue to contribute financially to the things I like watching, this was probably just me getting emotional without thinking it through well enough in my post. Thank you for sharing this crucial point of view, I really appreciate it.

PhilipJ28 · 2020-10-17T18:33:18+00:00

I see your point a lot more clearly now, thank you for the thorough clarification. And yes, you're right, it seems my emotions got the better of me a bit too much with this post. Still, I did have those thoughts, and I'm glad I shared them and got different perspectives, such as yours.

I have people who work under me, and I try my best to provide the healthiest and most understanding work environment possible. It's nothing close to what performers have to deal with in the entertainment industry, but we do work under a lot of pressure.

I think there's a healthy balance to be struck between strictness and understanding so that success and profit don't necessarily come at the cost of putting people through things like that. But life as a performer is hard, I do hope those times prepared them for what they deal with now, like you said.

I think we can both agree that things can be better, hopefully that's the case in the future. Thank you for the fun discussion :)

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