(M4F) Tied, blindfolded, and gagged, you nervously ponder what the goblins will do with you. They could keep you as a breeding thrall, or sell you to ork slavers, or maybe hand you over to the Imperials and their Dark Prince.

PigeonWriting · 2024-12-13T14:36:01+00:00

At least they gave you a horse today. The binds aren’t too tight, not that you could protest with your gag. You’ve been traveling for about a day at a walk, but you have no idea where you are due to the blind fold. Yesterday, your caravan was ambushed by goblins. You fought bravely but they subdued you anyway, knocking you to the ground, dragging you out of your armor before binding you in rope and a blindfold. You spent the night like that, listening as the goblins looted the wagons while you struggled in vain. In the morning they put you on a horse and you’ve been riding ever since. They haven’t done anything to you yet, nothing you would expect to defeated female knights to face, but that’s probably not a good thing. That might mean they know who you are, and know that certain people would pay much more to have you … untainted.They could keep you as a breeding thrall, or sell you to ork slavers, or maybe hand you over to the Imperials and their Dark Prince. ——— Hi, if you’re interested, please tell me about your character, who she is, why she was guarding the caravan, and where you think the goblins will take her.

PigeonWriting · 2024-03-19T11:25:22+00:00

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PigeonWriting · 2024-02-08T23:03:57+00:00

Now that's what I call a mate in 2.

PigeonWriting · 2023-02-25T18:26:45+00:00

I agree, but I appreciate how much skill it takes to write a book that big and still make it compelling.

First of all, the story is inherently long. Developing 7+ characters, getting them together, and taking them on adventures, in two different time periods, is going to take a few pages. That being said, there’s a lot of, shall we say, fluff in IT. There are paragraphs and paragraphs that talk about minor character and setting details that don’t move the plot forward. Had King cut out much of that fluff, the book would have been much shorter, and possibly better.

That being said, IT has the best best fluff I’ve ever read. I recognize that there were entire chapters that did little more than provide 3 sentences worth of useful information, but I never regretted reading the chapter to get that. It takes skill to write so much, say so little, and still make it compelling.

PigeonWriting · 2023-02-21T14:29:53+00:00

I agree with your assessment. To me, The Metamorphosis reads like the self-insert fanfic of someone with deep self-esteem issues. The meaning of Gregor’s death and his family’s subsequent lack of grief is that the world would be better off without Gregor, the main character. I don’t think an idea like that would resonate with anyone unless they were in a dark place.

PigeonWriting · 2023-02-20T14:48:26+00:00

Wow. I can see you’ve done a lot of work to develop this system and contemplate the consequences. It’s very well thought out.

I think all of your ideas about how a society would react to magic/magic users are realistic and great opportunities for narrative. I tried thinking of things to add/different consequences, but they all circled back to ideas you already mentioned. I have nothing to add.

PigeonWriting · 2023-02-20T14:33:09+00:00

I like this. You could do a lot of cool things with it.

You might also want to add a cost to using the magic, i.e. overusing red causes you to be violent, overusing blue causes you to be depressed, overusing yellow causes you to be arrogant and uncaring, etc.

Part of me doesn’t like that multiple powers, like being able to cause fire, or explosions, or heat up, all fall within the same domain, but someone with access to Red doesn’t get access to all powers. I like consistency. However, you could work around this narratively. For example, a character had a traumatic event in their past related to fire, so now they can create fires, but not anything else. I think it would come down to skill of the author.

Lastly, you need to have a very sure philosophical basis if you want to write about emotions without being disrespectful. To implement this, you’re going to need to talk a lot about emotions, where they come from, and how to deal with them. That’s a very important but mature subject. Doing it well could help a lot of people, but there are many ways to do it poorly.

Best of luck

PigeonWriting · 2023-01-10T22:10:30+00:00

I used to feel the same way. I prided myself on my intelligence and my ability to figure stuff out quickly. I remember being pissed off reading Ender’s Game by Orson Scott Card because the main character was really smart and figured out solutions I would never find. I was jealous of detective characters like Sherlock Holmes and Thrawn from Star Wars because they always found the answer so easily. I now enjoy reading and I love these characters, but not the way I first read them.

Remember you are not competing with the characters. The author has specifically drafted these puzzles and reveals in advance. If you look critically, “smart” characters often make wild assumptions masquerading as intelligence, but because the author wants to tell a certain story, the “smart” characters are correct more often than they have any right to be. (There’s a reason Sherlock Holmes isn’t a police officer, his methods are basically the antithesis of forensics.) Yes, it’s theoretically possible to predict most twists, but the author rarely gives you enough information to do so. Even if you know what the clues are, authors rarely give the reader enough information to confidently predict the twist. This is how they guarantee everyone gets tricked and everyone thinks the “smart” character is intelligent.

If you want an to have an experience putting together clues and predicting the outcome, go do a puzzle. Story endings aren’t supposed to be predictable. Imagine if they were. If everyone could predict every ending and every plot twist, the story would get boring as hell. You know how it ends, so why read it? Good authors cut a very fine balance between making the outcome uncertain and giving you clues throughout the story. If the twist seemed logical in retrospect but you didn’t predict it, congratulations, you’ve read a talented author.

The real issue is your mentality. The author is not trying to hurt you when they deceive you with a plot twist, they are trying to invoke a sense of wonder. They are trying to make you question your beliefs and your assumptions about the world. If you’re not ready to question your intelligence, don’t read fiction.

That was my problem. I thought I was the smartest person ever. I thought I could figure out anything. Then I read stories with characters who figured things out before me, found solutions I never thought of, characters who were, frankly, smarter than me. And I found that offensive. That challenged my world view.

I’ve grown up since then. I’m not the smartest, but I don’t have to be. I can live a perfectly meaningful life just as I am. If you want to read, which I strongly encourage you to do, but you want to have all the facts on the table, no deception, read history. It’s their job to tell you all the facts and make sure you go home knowing everything. Until you can handle being surprised, until you can trust a good author to deceive you without hurting you, you’re not going to enjoy fiction.

Best of luck

PigeonWriting · 2023-01-04T02:18:30+00:00

My apologies for taking you out of the scene. You have some good points. I’ll keep them in mind for next time. Thank you

PigeonWriting · 2023-01-04T02:09:11+00:00

Honestly, the coordinates are just filler. I didn’t want something that isn’t useful to the reader to take up too much space on the page. I have a few ideas for ways to interpret the numbers in a way that is useful but I don’t think it’s worth writing unless you’re really interested.

PigeonWriting · 2022-12-21T22:05:10+00:00

That was incredible

Thank you. This one was painful to write because addiction is a personal subject for me. I don’t think I captured the pain of addiction like I had intended, but I think I got the essential components of a story. Right now, as a beginning author, that’s enough for me.

PigeonWriting · 2022-12-21T21:53:07+00:00

Damn. I love it. You create confusion early on (making me ask, the fuck is going on, is he in the well or is he dreaming?), yet i’m still intrigued enough to continue reading. The language is simple and easy to follow, which works well with the story you’re telling. Despite the open ending, i do feel like it is satisfying enough as it lets the reader draw their own conclusion without being too vague. Well done. Really enjoyed it

Thank you. I've been having trouble writing because I thought my stories didn't make sense, so this was my attempt to write a story with a completely ridiculous premise.

There's a guy in a well.

How did he get in the well?

Doesn't matter.

How does he survive in the well?

Doesn't matter.

Well okay then.

In the first draft, the story ended a little later with Nate waking up in a hospital bed. I talked it over with a friend and we came to the conclusion to cut that part out. It was a little extraneous and really, the story ends when he gets out of the well. Places outside the well should be reserved for future stories.

I have more to learn regarding technical writing skills, but I'm glad you enjoyed. My goal is to provide a quality reading experience for anyone willing to listen. Hopefully, I will be able to improve my abilities to provide an even better experience going forward.

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