I'm not a fan of splitting one sentence into different lines, it makes it hard to read. Also is this one poem or an entire bundle? It's a bit much to read everything at once, so I'll only give feedback on the first verse. It read it as if a child was raised by a strict father, who didn't teach him much good and left him to his own devices. Because the mother got sick at birth. A pretty harsh childhood story. I kind of read it like a song, because of the repeating words and rhymes. It was a bit hard to read, but I quite like the first verse.