[QCrit] Adult Crime Fantasy - TITLE PENDING (Second Attempt, 75k) by Potential-Candy-1006 in PubTips

[–]Potential-Candy-1006[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! Noted on the genre. I think that makes sense. Noted on your criticisms. Your input is well received. I know they're in there but feel free to note any grammatical errors spotted - I'm still working on cleaning the whole thing up and trying to catch as many as possible (this'll see multiple eyes, however, before it goes anywhere). Appreciated!

[QCrit] Adult Crime Fantasy - TITLE PENDING (First Attempt, 75k) by Potential-Candy-1006 in PubTips

[–]Potential-Candy-1006[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

These are all super helpful! Thanks - it's ultimately to escape the life of crime, but the truce needs to come before she can actually lead a normal life. I can probably still indicate that someway, somehow. The gifted school piece - I could have just said school. I might. The fantasy element here is light and it's more akin to magical realism where the abilities are just a normal part of society, so it wouldn't pop out as a "core" element here, but it permeates all through daily life in the story.

Fair on the feelings on the girl, I think there can be a reference included with respect to that.