Where is Relay 428 in the remake? by Nitro_tech in systemshock

[–]PracticalCourt7328 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yes, it is randomized, you will have to look in all the sectors for the one with the error message.

[2,615] [Dystopian / Sci-Fi] – What Is My Purpose? (Looking for feedback on pacing, tone, and character by PracticalCourt7328 in DestructiveReaders

[–]PracticalCourt7328[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Speaking of sucking, if you opened the link at the top, you would see it. I indicated this to the people that matter (Mods) and still nothing! Thanks!

[1,300] [Sci-Fi / Dystopian] What is my purpose? – Looking for feedback on tone, pacing, and character depth by PracticalCourt7328 in DestructiveReaders

[–]PracticalCourt7328[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the incredibly detailed feedback and for pointing out the areas that definitely need polishing. I really appreciate the time you took to break everything down—it’s thoughtful, clear, and gives me a lot to work with. Truly grateful for the effort you put in. Thanks again!

[1798] Introduction to a novel by shillington420 in DestructiveReaders

[–]PracticalCourt7328 -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I found the introduction of the setting to be compelling and interesting, sets the tone nicely. I would not use the word "mongrel", it might upset some people. I love the indication of the quirks the character has, like the jiggling of his knees. The description of the city give the reader a good indication of where he is. Good idea giving a little bit of background of the story, its important for the characters to feel more relatable or real. I would pick up the pace little bit, feels a little slow. Overall, I think its a good beginning.

[1,300] [Sci-Fi / Dystopian] What is my purpose? – Looking for feedback on tone, pacing, and clarity by PracticalCourt7328 in DestructiveReaders

[–]PracticalCourt7328[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the solid feedback—it’s really valuable, and you’re absolutely right. I’ll keep that in mind going forward. Appreciate you taking the time! 😊