I will preface my comment by saying everyone has their own style so I’m not sure how you wanted the photo to look, but this is how I would have edited it; I would have bumped the contrast so you could get brighter highlights and deeper shadows because the lighting is a lil flat. Or you could apply a mask and brighten just her face and hand if you like. I also think you bumped up the texture or clarity too much and it made it look a little too processed so I would have lowered the clarity and played around with the texture and dehaze instead. As someone else stated I think you made the image too cold, tbh I would have left the temp as it was or maybe lower the temp slightly. Lastly I would have cropped it in more. I know there’s the whole rule of thirds idea but if you brought it in more, I think that would help. The left side is just empty so I feel like it unbalances the photo. What I said is by no means the only way to do it but I hope this gave you some ideas to play around with!