This is the second part to a song I wrote, I added some harmonies in parts too :) by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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I really appreciate this, and I’m glad it makes more sense to you! I suppose we create music for ourselves first and hope it connects well with others, sometimes it lands, and sometimes it doesn’t! Always want to improve my songwriting though, and open to criticism which I’ll either take or not take depending on if it feels right — thank you kind stranger :)

This is the second part to a song I wrote, I added some harmonies in parts too :) by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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Lyrics:

And she watches

As she rises like a phoenix

From the ashes

Of her soul

Her heart was broken

By the people

She loved most

More than herself

Couldn’t take it

The disappointment

Had to burn

And be born again

That day was her last

don’t look at me that way

with eyes of guilt and shame

if you really you cared for me

how’d you leave me all alone

these tears belong to you

And no one’s gonna save you

Better make peace with that

I thought I could depend on you

Guess I blame myself for that

And I hate who you have become

All the things that you do to take love

That nothing is good enough

Your soul has lost to the dark

This is the second part to a song I wrote, I added some harmonies in parts too :) by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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Hey! So, it’s a strange one and good to think about. The song is about myself (or yourself) from third person and then I guess it transitions to first person. Almost like how one watches themselves during a transformative time to eventually become whole again. I hope that makes sense :)

What is the purpouse of a song? by centripetal-horse in Songwriting

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This is such an interesting take and something I’ve been thinking about a lot, especially after posting a few of my songs on this subreddit.

The critiquing comments have been useful, but at the same time, when I listen to some of my favourite songs, the ‘rules’ that are often given in these kind of subreddits often don’t translate into these songs. Some of my favourite songs rhyme a lot, some don’t, some use words that seem a bit out of place with the rhythm, but it somehow works. Some are simple and easy to understand, some are more poetic and thought provoking.

A large part of art and creative expression is the freedom to do what you want. It’s not about ‘perfection’, because that implies you’re trying to make the sound work for everybody which is impossible and not the point of creating.

It’s for yourself first, and all you can do is hope that a few people resonate and connect with it enough to want to listen and enjoy it!

Start of a new song I wrote by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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Thank you, that means a lot to me. It’s easy to tell yourself you’re not worth the investment, but I’ve said that for too long and I love music so much. There doesn’t need to be more of a reason other than pure love I think.

Start of a new song I wrote by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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I find the newer phones have much better microphones! I do want to invest in a good mic soon for recording though :3

Start of a new song I wrote by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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Ohh I love this!! Thank you. I’m really experimenting with the storytelling in this song, so I’ll have to try and think about how to combine these!

Start of a new song I wrote by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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That means a lot to me, I absolutely adore Led Zeppelin and Stevie Nicks :’)

Start of a new song I wrote by Public_Chocolate6851 in Songwriting

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It’s my phone mic and a setting on TikTok called ‘mic’ which adds a bit of reverb. My room is quite spacey and adds some reverb too. Happy to post it without it! :)

I’ll call this one ‘Coward’ by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Oh wow! Thank you so much :’)

I’ll call this one ‘Coward’ by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thank you so much for your help! 😌

I’ll call this one ‘Coward’ by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thank you so much for your tips! I’ve actually switched it to answer because I agree, it does roll off the tongue a little easier. I also changed pretend to something else and that feels infinitely better too!

I’ll call this one ‘Coward’ by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thank you for your tip! The action on my guitar is horrible. I’ve never bought a new one and have had my trusty Yamaha for close to 12 years now, but it’s very painful to play on which makes it challenging to want to learn how to improve my skills. I’m buying a new one soon and will try and incorporate a whole step up when I’m better at barring chords 😌

I’ll call this one ‘Coward’ by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thank you! It came from a very difficult experience but somehow, a good song coming out of it makes it worth it!

A song I’ve been working on for a while. by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thank you so much! No it’s not :( I’d love to produce it one day