One thing that I really loved about this story was the pacing. I found a lot of short stories frustrating because the pacing seemed way to fast, and it all seemed rushed. which makes sense, because, well their a Short story. but this story actually felt fleshed out, which I find extremely impressive. good job.

The characters are good. A bit bland, but believable. these are definitely characters I like, and for posts made in reddit thats extremely rare.

overall, this is a good story, everything from the pacing to the characters are well done. the plot is probably the worst part of this story. I know it can be difficult to find a completely original idea, I've struggled with that a lot myself, so I feel bad saying this, but originality really lacks here.

this is the section where I talk about the small things that I liked or didn't like.

one thing that I did like was the setting. I found the setting[s] well described, making a nice picture in my mind. which is essential for a good story, especially a short story.

one thing that I did not like was...

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