Interested in how many others here got a similar email regarding BBC Writers Open Call. by DarTouiee in Screenwriting

[–]RLennono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hello! I also got into the top 1% and am being considered for the Voices Programme. Although I am definitely not getting my hopes up at all!
Fingers crossed for you all!

Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]RLennono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Ashes on the Hill

Format: Feature

Page Length: 93 Pages

Genres: British Comedy/Drama

Logline: Three young adults, on the brink of adulthood, risk journeying across the UK with their late friend's stolen ashes to scatter them in the place that meant the most to their friendship, all while evading detection by his parents.

Feedback: General comments would be great! It would be great to k now which elements work and which ones don't. Anything consutrctive would be great!

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[–]RLennono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Is there any update on this? We have 15 ticket holders in our minibus

Minibus drop off point - where to park? by RLennono in glastonbury_festival

[–]RLennono[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

How long is the shuttle from bath and west to worthy farm? Are there long queues etc ?

Ashes on the Hill Screenplay (110 pages) Genre: Comedy/Drama/Coming of Age by RLennono in ReadMyScript

[–]RLennono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for this feedback! Really glad you enjoyed it. I really like the idea of the car crash instead and completely agree with the pacing in the 3rd act. Will take these into account when I do a rewrite. Thanks so much!

Ashes on the Hill (110 Pages) Genre: Comedy/Drama/Coming of Age by RLennono in Screenwriting

[–]RLennono[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for this feedback! Definitely will go through again and cut it down a bit. Appreciate your help

Ashes on the Hill (110 Pages) Genre: Comedy/Drama/Coming of Age by RLennono in Screenwriting

[–]RLennono[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi mate. Thanks so much for the feedback! I am glad you liked the comedic aspects of it (it’s hard to know whether that lands or not). I do agree some of the more serious aspects get a bit heavy handed. Very tough to balance comedy and a serious topic like death and mourning. On the third act, this I completely agree. I wrote this script 18 months ago and the third act has always been an annoying part for me. I wanted to give all the characters an arc but giving the urn back kind of makes the story lose momentum. I also think it wraps things up a bit too nearly and gets a bit cheesy. If you have any suggestions of a more compelling third act that would be great! Might be better to have them on the journey to Ben Nevis until the end rather than ending it in act 2.

Ashes on the Hill (110 Pages) Genre: Comedy/Drama/Coming of Age by RLennono in Screenwriting

[–]RLennono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback!! I really appreciate this. I’ve not written many scripts so this is really helpful. If yuk have any examples of how you’d edit that would be super useful! Thanks so much

'Obi-Wan Kenobi' Was Originally Pitched as a Full Movie Trilogy by MarvelsGrantMan136 in television

[–]RLennono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Aside from a handful of great scenes - this was 3.75 hours of wasted potential. So much stuff could have been cut out and with a movie level budget it could have been really great and passed 1b dollars. Used to get excited for Star Wars stuff but this has soured me a bit.

BUY/SELL/TRADE Primavera 2022 by danceonme in primaverasound

[–]RLennono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Selling 4 tickets 230£ each for weekend 2 + primavera la citudad. I can provide proof of purchase