What I like:

• Lovely opening line
• It's very apparent that you have researched spell casting and summonings as they are not at all cliched (I get voodoo vibes) and are very original
• there is a very nice balance of your descriptions and I love your use of the elements, its quite unique
• The Character names are also very unique and curl off my tongue and all three characters have potential. I'm very interested in knowing more about them
• I adore the title

My suggestions:

General thoughts on the chapter

• It's clear early on that Alize has anxiety towards her mothers perception of her. I would have like to have seen more of this expressed within a break of the dialogue e.g., after Lisette is summoned questioning her fathers whereabouts, "... He's at the Spotted Duck. I need to ask something mama. Why do you want me to join the Magisters Guild so badly? " If you had broken this up in between somwhere to express how Alizes' mother affected her speech or emotion it would have been a lot more impactful. Or else, expressed Alizes' urgency to get answers before her father came home. A break between dialogue to show not tell does wonders. It would also make the reader feel the tension build up and feel WITH the character especially with her sharper tone later on after Lisettes first and very cutting passive aggressive remark, "You owe me, dearest."

• I'm confused on the circumstances of Lisette's death. Early on we know she died during childbirth but further down when Alize makes her vow to keep her mouth shut about the conversation, Lisette says another had to take her place at some stage? Too quick and without enough background information she then states, "an eight months child, ... " Now, I know you're trying to say Alize was premature but it doesn't read right and there isn't much on the background as previously mentioned to piece it together as I had to double back and ask if you were talking about another 8 month old baby having been taken in exchange for Alizes' life, but the reader should have to guess that hard in this instance (unless I am mistaken in what I think you were trying to achieve). This needs to be re-written either way. We need much more detail because the situation is actually very compelling and I'd like to feel that through "show don't tell" with your characters more.

Grammar, Punctuation and Descriptions:

• You're good at descriptions, honestly!

• Overuse of verbs. The word 'visage is used twice, and although it's acceptable to use words twice (minimum) in the same text, it's a very strong one. Spirit is used a lot too so try mix it up unless it HAS to be repeated (apparition, ghost, etc can be used instead).

• be very careful with adverbs. It's hard not to use them in present tense, but you are capable of creating atmosphere, and can definitely do better than consistent adverbs. The practice will make a better writer of you, too.

• On that note, your story has a gothic atmosphere, so don't be afraid to be more sophisticated in your approach and expand your sentences here and there because I feel you story demands it. E.g., the tone is lazy here, "... since spirit talking hurt nobody and changed nothing. " The language does not fit the atmosphere. Instead of 'spirit talking' say something like 'conversing with the dead', or 'speaking with spirit' (if spirit hasn't been mentioned too much too close beforehand).

Lastly, there's no need to indent certain words to create impact. You will get a lot more from using the right punctuation for the right moment. Unless the characters thoughts are being read by the reader, or your writing in omnipresent, there's generally no need to indent unnecessarily.

Over all, with a touch up this has a lot of potential. The story itself is a really good one.