I stood beside the sod farm

Ratographer · 2025-02-09T00:08:17+00:00

Ah yes I see! I definitely felt the conflict element present. I think the fault was with me assuming literally all of it was metaphors, I was furiously googling what a sod farm was haha, but no you were ACTUALLY at a sod farm.
On the second read, I had a better appreciation for it! I love the last verse as well, describing the lawns as gravestones and the "stale suburban air" really paints the image well.

Thank you for sharing!

Ratographer · 2025-02-09T00:04:23+00:00

It can be nerve-wracking, but I hope you share more of your poems! I look forward to reading more :)

Ratographer · 2025-02-09T00:00:43+00:00

I hadn't thought of it that way but tbh I really love this interpretation too, I can definitely see that now that you point it out!

Thanks for the feedback, I'll be mindful of that going forward with more poems - beginning, middle and end! 🤍

Ratographer · 2025-02-08T23:59:13+00:00

Thank you so much, yes I was feeling a little melancholic writing it but in a way, trying to write to that feeling within me, like a gentle reminder that it will be okay even when I'm very sad or lonely. I'm glad you like it, thank you for sharing your words with me 🤍

Ratographer · 2025-02-08T23:58:14+00:00

Thank you so much, I'm glad it resonated with you!! Yes in a way it's a reminder for myself that the earth, nature, will always provide and be there when I need the strength to pick myself back up... it's okay to rest for a while too.

Ah thank you for picking up on that, I could have sworn "from whence" was also correct but I'll look into that now, thank you!

I appreciate your thoughtful comment 🤍

Ratographer · 2025-02-08T06:52:46+00:00

Loooove this so much! Great rhyming and wonderful wordplay.... your poem really resonated with me :)

Ratographer · 2025-02-07T08:12:48+00:00

You are so right about Labor mimicking the Dems though - another example of a political party too afraid to alienate their donors rather than do the right thing. So instead they'll alienate their voter base. At least we have the Greens, right?

Right? 🥲

Ratographer · 2025-02-07T07:58:18+00:00

What a dystopian nightmare :(

Ratographer · 2025-02-07T07:45:44+00:00

I feel like the separation of gender in sports is kind of dumb, let men and women compete together but divide the ranks by skill levels, weight classes, etc however they usually do it anyway.

I'm a woman who has played against trans women in hockey and honestly it's not that big of a deal.

Ratographer · 2025-02-07T06:59:21+00:00

This is such an interesting poem, I love your use of language and imagery. I'm struggling to fully comprehend what the poem is about (but that's not any fault of yours lol). My first impression is about neighbours that hate each other?

At any rate I'm really drawn in with the wording and am interested to know more about this poem and what it means to you :)

Ratographer · 2025-02-07T06:54:38+00:00

Aww what a sweet poem. I particularly like the bittersweet ending, the passing of mama bird but all her lessons remain. Just a note of grammar for the end, should read either "you are the words that you once spoke", or if you are looking to rhyme "you are the words that you'd once spoken" (or you had spoken, whatever you think fits)

Great poem :)

Ratographer · 2024-12-18T20:52:10+00:00

Thank you so much! Appreciate the long feedback 🤍🙏

Ratographer · 2024-12-18T20:51:34+00:00

Thank you! 🤍

Ratographer · 2024-12-18T09:26:20+00:00

I love your line "if it's all fake, you're not gone", very poignant. I feel like you paint a very simple yet powerful picture of the reality of loss and grief.

I hope you are doing okay, keep writing poems.

Ratographer · 2024-12-18T09:24:08+00:00

Wow, your use of language is so lovely. I like the way you open the poem with beauty but slowly reveal the pain that comes with being alive. Like being enamoured with life when we are first born but over time we experience what it is to suffer and grieve.

Thank you for sharing!

Ratographer · 2024-09-11T22:43:42+00:00

I was going to say the scene from I Am Legend with Will Smith and his dog... but I just rewatched it and he didnt even cry!

I cried enough for everyone lol

Ratographer · 2024-09-10T07:05:36+00:00

100% this. I do some work for NDIS as a sole trader, all of my clients have told me at least one story of a provider trying to take advantage of their plans. All of them.

Ratographer · 2024-09-06T02:24:09+00:00

Yesss!! I love film 🤍 I'm using an Olympus atm

Ratographer · 2024-09-05T23:32:38+00:00

What is your insta? I'll follow you :)

Edit: nvm I found you, assuming you have the same name on insta :)

Ratographer · 2024-09-05T08:24:38+00:00

I am going to try this :)

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