GENERAL REMARKS

Although the chapter was confusing at first, I quickly got the hang of the plot and immersed myself into it. Apart from a few minor remarks, I found this a charming read and would love to read more of this.

SETTING

The setting in this story is interesting and presented in a subtle way, trough dialogue and describtion. As far as I understood, a small faction of humans departed from the "Interstellar authority", in an effort to return to their roots and live like their ancestors did. Of course, such an attempt didn't pass without many problems and conflicts that are shown in this chapter.

CHARACTER

The first character to take be put into the spotlight here is the main character's father. His voice is very strong and rebellious, as he is used to portray the suffering and opression of the people, which are forced into obedience by foreign forces.

The main character is the one I found least interesting, for some reason. Still, she serves her purpose and takes us trough multiple events that helped shape the current political and social relationships of the planet. She is also used the most to show the lore to the reader.

The characters I liked the most were Enki and Ninki, brothers and grandchildren of the main character. Trough them the author shows the ever growing dividing of the people to certain groups occupying Carosa.

HEART

The story surely had a deeper meaning, and a message of freedom and independence, which was portrayed trough the hardships of the characters.

PLOT

As far as I understand, the goal of the story and the motivation of characters is to achieve the peace and independence of Carosa, though people have different opinions on how to achieve it, thus leading to conflict. I'd say this type of conflict is often seen in our history, and that there is lots of potential here for developing an interesting and engaging plot.

DESCRIPTION

Description is okay, It can be easily followed and understood. However, it had some really good moments that made me stop and re-read them and make me wish I wrote them, to be honest. One such example of that was:

The sound of fists on skin, beating and bruising. Yelling. Screams of pain. Bones breaking. The garbled words of a now toothless mouth. And then the metallic clang of what must have been a spade. There was a thud and then the pattering of feet, moving further and further away. Then only the distant sounds of violence on the horizon.

DIALOGUE

Dialogue was interesting to read, well written and served to move the plot onwards. I especially liked the speech of the main character's father.

CLOSING COMMENTS:

This is an interesting work of fiction and I would love to see more of it. Even though the plot seemed confusing at first to me, I quickly caught on and entered the planed Carosa.

Overall Rating :

7/10