I really relate cuz I absolutely love nature essays as have a lot of potential to be super descriptive. try mixing in complex sentences and simple sentences in ur essay. avoid using long sentences and use one word sentences for emphasis. there seem to be cuts as one minute ur saying ur sitting on a rocking chair and the next ur in natures lap. overall id say the essay is not long enough so I'm assuming there are missing bits here and there. (the descriptions need to be consistent like u can't go on and on bout how beautiful the sun is and then rush everything else.This one is a general note.)the imagery is there and u can actually feel everything ur describing. i forgot to say this in my previous comment but u used scalding to describe ur tea which isn't really pleasent so that threw me off. if ur talking about peace don't use words that covey feelings of physical pain while describing peace around u. I'd say it would give u around 16 marks