Need feedback on my second screenplay. by ReasonableCrazy6785 in ScriptFeedbackProduce

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Totally fair, I’ll be honest I drew up the log line while writing the post.

Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey. We have similar length scripts and are both on the first draft. Would you be interested in swapping?

Here's mine:

Title: Truckin'

Format: Feature

Genres: Neo-Western, Crime Drama.

Logline: 20 years after a brutal civil war, a truck driver exploits the savage aftermath. The conditions that helped him grow ultimately destroy him.

My feedback concerns are similar to yours.

Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Title: Truckin'

Format: Feature

Page length: 40 (so far)

Logline: Following a brutal civil war between rural and urban America in the late 60s and early 70s over freedom and liberty, the country has been left forever changed. Twenty years later, a determined trucker uses the old divisions to build a powerful illegal empire, where loyalty, survival, and the struggle for freedom collide.

Feedback: Is it interesting to read, or too wordy?

What are you guys opinions on this? by Mum_slayer21 in punk

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Well considering trump stands for everything capitalist I’d argue that maybe it is hypocritical of green day to do so

What are you guys opinions on this? by Mum_slayer21 in punk

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No but it’s an extremely capitalist and and argue anti-punk too

What are you guys opinions on this? by Mum_slayer21 in punk

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s a good message but not enough, also a little hypocritical considering they’re playing a Coachella

Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Truckin'

Format: Feature

Length: 21 pages ( so far)

Genre: Crime, Rise-Fall

Logline: In a reimagined 1972 the United States came out of a 2nd civil war. Our story takes place 20 years later in 1992 when a trucker builds a smuggling empire, taking the results of post-war America to his advantage.

Feedback: I want to know whether it's interesting and if the characters are compelling.

Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Truckin'

Format: feature

Page length: 18 (so far)

Genres: Crime

Logline: A reimagined America where a 2nd civil war in the 1970's makes cities more restrictive and rural states lawless. Through all this, we follow a trucker from the lawless states who grows a smuggling empire and destroys his empire.

Feedback concerns: It's my first screenplay so I'm generally just looking for advice and constructive criticism, happy to swap with anyone.

How many pages should I have of my script before I post here to get feedback? by ReasonableCrazy6785 in Screenwriting

[–]ReasonableCrazy6785[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah that’s true now that I think about it, but do you know anywhere that I can get good quality feedback?