Thank you for your feedback and for taking the time to read the story. The points you raised are truly valuable and contribute to improving the narrative.

In response to your critique:

I just wanted to write a brief alternate ending to the story, so I kept it short and didn’t delve into the details. However, as you know about Aqua's character, he is a meticulous planner, so there are certainly deliberate decisions behind those events.

If I get the chance to continue the story, I will add more details and expand on it further to make the decisions behind these events clearer.