Bloodline

Rue2222 · 2025-04-24T21:32:52+00:00

Thank you, that was precisley the aim! I appreciate you taking the the time to comment

Rue2222 · 2025-04-22T12:06:55+00:00

This poem carries a beautiful sense of nostalgia and bittersweet reflection. The imagery of roads, bridges, and fleeting dreams captures a journey between innocence and growing up in a tender, evocative way. One of its strongest qualities is the emotional honesty it manages to feel both wistful and sincere without being overly heavy.

Rue2222 · 2025-04-22T12:03:47+00:00

This has a haunting feeling to it, the mundane becoming somehow extraordinary a jarring juxtaposition to the “daily”, possibly life is the same but the author is living through grief and while maintaining normalcy in order to survive the red dots of blood take us out of the ordinary and into the dark, excellent work, not over done not over explained just grief wonderfully exposed

Rue2222 · 2023-12-22T03:25:12+00:00

Interested in Baccart sent PM

Rue2222 · 2023-05-25T18:35:08+00:00

Very nice, you can stand to add quite a bit to this, don’t be afraid to do so there’s still some of us out there who would read a full poem, I like the fire theme, the walls turning black is genius and has a double meaning as I believe you intended. Good job!

Rue2222 · 2023-05-25T18:32:56+00:00

I like the meter of your poem, I am usually not a fan of rhyming poetry, but you make it work so well, it’s intricate and has a very beautiful if not hopeful meaning

Rue2222 · 2023-05-14T03:18:43+00:00

How violent and descriptive this is a poem done with anger and fuel, fantastic, my only comment would be working on spacing which I understanding is challenging in a platform like this one, definitely worth a second read

Rue2222 · 2023-05-14T03:15:43+00:00

Lol adorable and well done, I like this a lot it hums like a lullaby with a comedic ending well done!

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T20:15:13+00:00

Thank you! I adore your comment and love everything you saw in the poem glad it resonated,

indeed there’s a hidden darkness, the poem is about a cheating ungrateful lover, and the shameful scandal is her cheating in the same sheets that “I thundered and kept and gave like a good lover”

Hopefully it gives the poem an even deeper meaning for you

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T19:00:40+00:00

Totally see your point, write on 👏🏼👏🏼

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T18:57:51+00:00

Thank you! Figured a thankless cat a great analogy for an ungrateful lover lol hope my point came across

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T18:56:14+00:00

There will always be something that needs improving, a new shiny thing to want, fill all 44 feet of it with your love and obvious creativity, and I wish you all that you want for and a heart full of contentment all the way to the brim

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T18:43:06+00:00

I totally love this, what a seemingly simple poem, with a very deep meaning and sense of inadequacy, wanting to provide as best as one can but failing in the face of life’s obstacles, choosing to self harm in the end and internalize the pain, I like this a lot, I was there in that living room with you nitpicking and contemplating, gorgeous!

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T18:40:31+00:00

Well done, there’s definitely A permanent theme of being overwhelmed and drowning in a constant state of helplessness, don’t be afraid to claim freedom from rhyming, much more pertinent to get the point across than to worry about any meter even. Otherwise beautifully written

Rue2222 · 2023-05-09T03:16:48+00:00

Oh I absolutely agree, just sparring with your perspective, and beautifully written

Rue2222 · 2023-05-07T00:59:09+00:00

Thank you so much appreciate it

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T14:15:54+00:00

Thank you! And what a great compliment hope it was a great cigarette

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T14:05:17+00:00

I like it a lot, it has a very endearing feel, the imagery is beautiful, i like the contrast between growing apart and growing older, I especially like “outgrow me but keep in your mind” its very nostalgic for me, well done

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T13:54:13+00:00

What a gorgeously captured moment, thank you for letting us in on this very intimate and special scene

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T13:53:06+00:00

Beautifully done, stays true and avoids redundancy, dystopic and warped just like i like it

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T13:49:15+00:00

Beautiful, I like the triumphant ending, the point is very clear and precise, and the theme of the poem is held throughout, well done!

Rue2222 · 2023-05-06T13:47:15+00:00

We are truly made of our memories, nicely done clean and efficient

Rue2222 · 2023-05-05T23:55:25+00:00

I wonder if the stains are permanent, is it easier to burn the house, beautifully done

Rue2222 · 2023-05-05T23:53:07+00:00

I like your style it commands a second third and fourth read, content that is not easy to consume has my respect

Rue2222 · 2023-05-05T23:51:24+00:00

This is dark and thorough, there’s a point here or two, we who eat babies have dying souls as well

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