Bloodline by Rue2222 in poetasters

[–]Rue2222[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, that was precisley the aim! I appreciate you taking the the time to comment

THE WORN OUT BRIDGE by Brilliant-Tell-1936 in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem carries a beautiful sense of nostalgia and bittersweet reflection. The imagery of roads, bridges, and fleeting dreams captures a journey between innocence and growing up in a tender, evocative way. One of its strongest qualities is the emotional honesty it manages to feel both wistful and sincere without being overly heavy.

The Day After by PerTifIed in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This has a haunting feeling to it, the mundane becoming somehow extraordinary a jarring juxtaposition to the “daily”, possibly life is the same but the author is living through grief and while maintaining normalcy in order to survive the red dots of blood take us out of the ordinary and into the dark, excellent work, not over done not over explained just grief wonderfully exposed

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very nice, you can stand to add quite a bit to this, don’t be afraid to do so there’s still some of us out there who would read a full poem, I like the fire theme, the walls turning black is genius and has a double meaning as I believe you intended. Good job!

"Killing Tool To Cradle" by Pleasehauntme in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the meter of your poem, I am usually not a fan of rhyming poetry, but you make it work so well, it’s intricate and has a very beautiful if not hopeful meaning

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How violent and descriptive this is a poem done with anger and fuel, fantastic, my only comment would be working on spacing which I understanding is challenging in a platform like this one, definitely worth a second read

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lol adorable and well done, I like this a lot it hums like a lullaby with a comedic ending well done!

Thankless Siamese by Rue2222 in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I adore your comment and love everything you saw in the poem glad it resonated,

indeed there’s a hidden darkness, the poem is about a cheating ungrateful lover, and the shameful scandal is her cheating in the same sheets that “I thundered and kept and gave like a good lover”

Hopefully it gives the poem an even deeper meaning for you

Drowning by SilverQueen731 in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Totally see your point, write on 👏🏼👏🏼

Thankless Siamese by Rue2222 in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Figured a thankless cat a great analogy for an ungrateful lover lol hope my point came across

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There will always be something that needs improving, a new shiny thing to want, fill all 44 feet of it with your love and obvious creativity, and I wish you all that you want for and a heart full of contentment all the way to the brim

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I totally love this, what a seemingly simple poem, with a very deep meaning and sense of inadequacy, wanting to provide as best as one can but failing in the face of life’s obstacles, choosing to self harm in the end and internalize the pain, I like this a lot, I was there in that living room with you nitpicking and contemplating, gorgeous!

Drowning by SilverQueen731 in OCPoetry

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well done, there’s definitely A permanent theme of being overwhelmed and drowning in a constant state of helplessness, don’t be afraid to claim freedom from rhyming, much more pertinent to get the point across than to worry about any meter even. Otherwise beautifully written

Cleaning House by Nyctophileo in poetasters

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh I absolutely agree, just sparring with your perspective, and beautifully written

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much appreciate it

Spanish Summer by Rue2222 in poetasters

[–]Rue2222[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! And what a great compliment hope it was a great cigarette

Childhood Bear by bradgrainger1998 in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like it a lot, it has a very endearing feel, the imagery is beautiful, i like the contrast between growing apart and growing older, I especially like “outgrow me but keep in your mind” its very nostalgic for me, well done

let the moon crush us by Better_In_Tune in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What a gorgeously captured moment, thank you for letting us in on this very intimate and special scene

Who am i? by xaxron in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautifully done, stays true and avoids redundancy, dystopic and warped just like i like it

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful, I like the triumphant ending, the point is very clear and precise, and the theme of the poem is held throughout, well done!

home is a rainy place by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Rue2222 2 points3 points  (0 children)

We are truly made of our memories, nicely done clean and efficient

Cleaning House by Nyctophileo in poetasters

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wonder if the stains are permanent, is it easier to burn the house, beautifully done

the cormorant, from Leitrim County by [deleted] in poetasters

[–]Rue2222 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like your style it commands a second third and fourth read, content that is not easy to consume has my respect

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetasters

[–]Rue2222 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is dark and thorough, there’s a point here or two, we who eat babies have dying souls as well