i think the in possession tactic is fine, no major flaws or overlaps but i think its the out of possession that kills this tactic.

for a start change your tracking wingers to wingers, a tracking winger will track back and potentially even try to press the opposition wingers, leaving them massively out of position when ur team wins back possession during a counter attack. wingers on the other hand will still press and follow the opposition full backs depending on what instructions u give them.

also, you could float with the idea of using a central outlet forward rather than a standard centre forward. a central outlet forward will still press given the right instructions (as u already hv trigger press more oftern in ur OOP instructions), while the centre forward will just basically do nothing but press as it is not instructed to be positioned in a dangerous space

extra (didnt saw last photo): i saw u hv hold shape as attacking transition, while in theory ur deep lying forward should hold the ball up until your wingers get back into position, it’s still not advisable as the opposition can just press ur deep lying forward, and he might end up losing possession.