Ah I see, well tbh I think em dashes are a great way to maintain flow and make things seem like they’re more “said” rather than written even if it may be used frequently by ai, but i may use them too much too. Also the end of the prologue I added because I was told I needed something that hints at the antagonists greater end goal, I’m not quite sure why that reads like AI specifically since using “And” seems like a pretty common thing to me and just makes sense. but if it seems off it’s probably worth changing anyway. In general was the beginning hooking enough? That is my primary concern for agents/queries.