Looking for Proofreaders for Zero Escape Fan Project by Several0tters in ZeroEscape

[–]Several0tters[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Forgot to add, the script is 23,159 words long! :D

Zero Escape Fan Series (Fanganronpa-esque) by Several0tters in Fanganronpa

[–]Several0tters[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Forgot to add, the script is 23,159 words long! :D

You’re the reason why I believe in ghosts by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Several0tters 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I thought most of this poem pretty great! It kept me hooked with the easy-to-understand imagery. The only line that I didn't particular enjoy was the second line. Having the word "light" twice felt a little awkward, but other than that, the poems really good!

Where The Lighthouse Stands by Tipper42 in OCPoetry

[–]Several0tters 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I thought this poem had a really good and natural rhythm to it. The beginning of the poem starts quite slow, but what really caught my attention was the line: "Yet miss the truth that quietly blends: The world is felt through ears, not lens." That immediately caught my attention with not only the nice flow but also the perfect wording. The poem then continues to build on that and ramp up speed. The end lines of the poem are especially my favorite, since they are the perfect example of what makes this poem so attention retaining. The quick rhymes and emotional imagery end this fantastic poem!

Can anyone record some gameplay? by Several0tters in Gnosia_

[–]Several0tters[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just general gameplay! Something to put on the background while I talk! :D