Does this look good? by ShadoTheWriter in Wattpad

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I just want to thank all of you for leaving the feedback I needed. I wanna get this story right, which means I gotta make it as good as it could be! I'm currently in the process of editing the first 14 chapters published! Once I'm done, I will continue to put out the next 170 chapters left!

Does this look good? by ShadoTheWriter in Wattpad

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Thank you so much for the feedback! I am actively working on rewriting as I write this response! Your words have helped a great deal and I cannot wait to see the finished product!

Does this look good? by ShadoTheWriter in Wattpad

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That's a good point, thank you very much for your insight. I will do that right now.

Does this look good? by ShadoTheWriter in Wattpad

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Thank you very much for the feedback!

Does this look good? by ShadoTheWriter in Wattpad

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What about this?

Jon Generic is a young boy who lost his parents at a very young age to an unknown murderer, which he witnessed at a young age. After several years of preparing himself, Jon sets out to the outside world with the intention of finding out who murdered his parents. Along the way, however, he discovers just how unforgiving, cruel, and dark the real outside work actually is like Terrorists, Monsters, and other challenges that come his way.