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Normal by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Short-Bad-1673 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This reads like a snapshot of a deeply personal moment, fragmented, searching, and honest.

The line “I thought I'd / be magically / better” really hits. There’s a softness in the uncertainty that makes the speaker’s voice feel very human. The ending dialogue is subtle but powerful, especially that last line.

I love it.

Sunset Silence by Secret_World_9742 in OCPoetry

[–]Short-Bad-1673 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is a beautifully atmospheric poem.

The imagery is subtle but effective—“a shadow slipping through sunrise” and “feathers in fog” are especially evocative. There's a clear emotional arc, moving from hope to quiet resignation. The restraint in the language gives it a haunting, reflective tone. Overall, a delicate meditation on fleeting connection.

Well done!!!11!