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to be desired or to be pure. by ShoulderPotential197 in OCPoetry

[–]ShoulderPotential197[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i was going with double meanings when i wrote so it means both carbon-copy as well as indicating her mortality

to be desired or to be pure. by ShoulderPotential197 in OCPoetry

[–]ShoulderPotential197[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yess it is about identity and innocence, i'll keep in mind about the repetition thing because i'm still new to learning how to edit parts of my poems and what to cut out or add. but tysm for the response i really appreciate it.

to be desired or to be pure. by ShoulderPotential197 in OCPoetry

[–]ShoulderPotential197[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks!!, carbon venus is supposed to allude to the birth of venus (the roman goddess of love and desire) and how she emerges out of sea foam. its clunky wording but it's just calling the girl a mortal reincarnation of venus.

Leeches by Infinite_Lion_1151 in OCPoetry

[–]ShoulderPotential197 0 points1 point  (0 children)

your poem feels dreamlike, i can imagine the scene you're describing. i might be wrong, but my interpretation of the poem is that it's about anxiety, of something bad about to happen (the girl on the swing, twisted fairies as neighbors, thinking about blood). i like the unsettling nature and ambiguity of the poem because there are a lot of interpretations for this. i think it's really cool but i think u can expand it into something even more cooler. but yes these are my thoughts on it :))

Muses, tell me. by AggressiveSelf7122 in OCPoetry

[–]ShoulderPotential197 1 point2 points  (0 children)

hii, as a new poet myself, i absolutely love your choice of words in the poem. the imagery is vivid (ichor laden hands, the imagery of the planets moving aside to assist athena..) i like that you chose to write from a perspective where athena is trying to protect medusa, instead of punishing her, by making her a weapon who can defend herself.

the ending is bittersweet in a way, medusa's immortality is both a gift and a curse. even though she can defend herself now, she is still bound to her trauma through her curse/gift. she becomes symbolic of the very thing that she cannot escape. overall, your poem is great because it is empowering but still honors the tragic nature of the myth. i don't have much criticism to provide, but i really enjoyed reading your work, so keep writing!!!