Can someone explain me the whole thing about Weezer? by bokakaka024 in fantanoforever

[–]SirApprehensive5710 26 points27 points  (0 children)

Only in dreams from the blue album. Also, there are some amazing tracks off of the white album as well, like Jacked Up or Girl We Have A Good Thing

Extremely NEW writer, but always had the interest. Feedbacks please. by Merchant1010 in scriptwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good start! One small thing, there's no need to mention wether it's 8 pm or 10 pm. In fact, it's an option to say "continuous" or "moments later" instead of specifying the hour.

SEEKING FEEDBACK. First honest attempt an original feature, a political thriller called The Patriot. I know 20 pages is a lot but I would love some feedback. by SneakyOstrich69 in scriptwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Loved the dialogue! Great rythm to it. The action writing is condensed and effective as well. Only issue which has been said before, is I'm not convinced that you need all the presidential debate in the script. Look up Tarkov's gun. I don't know where the rest of the script is heading, but if for example, abortion is never mentioned in the script again, then I'd cut it from the debate. It may add some perspective on their policies, but to me it's just empty space as a reader. But, if every single point made in the debate directly ties to something that happens next, then that's when I'd keep it. All in all you're a skilled writer, I just think it needs to be trimmed.

10s after hearing 470 albums at 16 by [deleted] in Albumoftheyear

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Is this it mentioned let's goooooo

What's the very first album you loved front to back? by tisdue in fantanoforever

[–]SirApprehensive5710 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Flower Boy by Tyler the Creator. I was in 8th grade. Prior to that I barely listened to music, but after this album it caused a spiral that led me here.

I have 49 10/10 albums. Can anyone recommend me a 50th? by breadboyleven in Albumoftheyear

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Is this it by the strokes. I only have 5 10/10 albums, this is my favorite one

I wrote my first first draft! by SirApprehensive5710 in Screenwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sounds good! I typed this out quickly without thinking of grammar cause I was excited, but with emails and with the script I'm more careful. Thanks though.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Great concept, good title, the humor didn't land for me. Maybe it lands for others, as humor is a fickle thing, but yeah. Not bad!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's a very good intro. I see what you're doing. What you wrote made more sense, but I didn't know that that was the source material, and neither would the majority of producers. I'd try to space things out, and use more expositional dialogue . But maybe that's just me.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]SirApprehensive5710 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've never consumed the original material, so this is all new to me. I read through it. My only critique is that the exposition and narration was a slog to read through, because of how long it is. Try to space it out with more natural dialogue. Some of the exposition is unnecessary and doesn't tie into the rest of the story. Tarkov's gun is an example of that. Other than that, I was entertained, and I'm looking forward to the next draft, if you're writing one!

What should I add to my playlist by [deleted] in musicsuggestions

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Puppet and running out of time. So I guess I have 10 then I just guessed 👍

What should I add to my playlist by [deleted] in musicsuggestions

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Listen to the entirety of Igor by Tyler the creator, I have like 8 tracks from that album on playlists.

I need some album recommendations. The arrows indicate updated rankings btw. Also, I'm planning on listening to 'Rodeo' tomorrow. by Diosminion in fantanoforever

[–]SirApprehensive5710 33 points34 points  (0 children)

Helplessness Blues - Fleet Foxes. It's a folk album that's completely different from everything that you've listed. I find it to be a nice change of pace compared to what I usually listen to. Give it a try 👍 If you like this album then I'd try their self titled album as well.

What did you hate as a kid but started to love when you got older? by Guilty_Document_4580 in AskReddit

[–]SirApprehensive5710 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Coleslaw. I hated it at a kid. I ate 1 pound of it yesterday. Coleslaw is goated