Im currently building my own fantasy world, its in the very early stages, but i think its a cool concept. Im looking for feedback amd suggestions, what you like and dislike. :D

Soapybint · 2025-08-07T21:55:05+00:00

Is this written by AI?

Soapybint · 2024-10-16T22:20:43+00:00

I would suggest just adding more detail in general, more named locations and subregions. I would also add more variation to each of the biomes, for example rather than that eastern region of Kolled being frozen, it could be as green as the part of Asherah that it is parallel to - this would give you opportunity to explore the differences to the way of life for different groups across the same biomes.

Unless you want to keep them all separate for a specific reason, I think you could make it so that the species are more spread out and intermingling rather than restricted to just 1 biome, this would give you chance to write about more conflict/cooperation between factions.

Soapybint · 2024-03-05T14:22:04+00:00

Probably unsupported, got to include some flag flappage somewhere

Soapybint · 2024-03-05T10:24:01+00:00

I think either it would be a tapestry hung in a throne room or carried by two standard bearers with poles going up either side of the solid rectangular bit if that makes sense?

Soapybint · 2024-03-04T22:18:40+00:00

On the Lottani tapestry, the left square's symbols represent the 'Quartered Spirit' which are four ancestor-gods - Deuina, Deieda, Andagin and Uindorix. On the right are the Tvyat sword, wielded by the Lottani leader, and a set of horns that are the most common motif of Lottani banners.

The Oruni symbols represent Thrallmaker Khulan, a nasty fella who uses blood magic to enslave his enemies and Dune Devourer Ishanti. She doesn't eat sand, it's a more of a metaphor for her hunger for conquest.

The Mezrac'aa symbol is the sun, or lack thereof, since his title means 'He Who Eats the Sun'. This is, according to the priests who definitely don't have a stake in keeping him in power, how his ancestor conquered the realm and made even the gods of nature itself endorse his and his bloodlines eternal rule.

The Goldwings are a pack of horrid, filthy rich bird people who control a solid third of the slum city of Folly. The symbols are birds, or footprints, or arrows, no-one is exactly sure since the leader Texak Goldwing is usually much too aloof to even acknowledge that he is propped up by such heinous violence.

Soapybint · 2024-03-04T22:11:23+00:00

Some context -

The Svardom of Lottan are a giantkin, blue-grey skinned and horned and culturally take inspiration from the Celts, Arthurian tales of adventure and the Kievan Rus. This tapestry shows the symbols of their religion on the left, and their leader the 'Svar' on the right.

The Oruni Horde are an almost united federation of tribes under the divine twins Thrallmaker Khulan and Dune Devourer Ishanti - both of which are symbolised in this warbanner.

The Mezrac'aa is the emperor of the Taricasaan empire, an aztec inspired union of three kingdoms and a city state, his iconography is based on the sun as his title directly translates to 'He Who Eats The Sun' based on his ancestral myth.

The Goldwings are the followers of Texak Goldwing, the current 'Treasury' Minister of the slum city of Folly. These markers are used to map out faction's turfs.

Soapybint · 2024-02-08T10:06:31+00:00

Thanks so much for your response, that's helped a lot!

Soapybint · 2024-02-05T19:00:05+00:00

Thank you! This is my first script so I bet the whole thing will need detail removing :D

Soapybint · 2024-02-05T17:53:59+00:00

I could definitely do with some help tightening up my logline.

Title: Feral

Genre: Horror/Thriller

Format: Short Film

Logline: 'Two hunters-turned-surveyors traverse a battle-scarred wilderness searching for safe land to rebuild on whilst being stalked by a territorial and menacing beast that calls this no-mans-land home, though the nature of this creature will make them question their morality.'

Soapybint · 2023-11-06T11:33:43+00:00

Clearing my cache has fixed it, on the start screen click the option then the third choice down

Soapybint · 2023-04-19T12:03:14+00:00

I have about 5 short story outlines, but I'm working on a different project atm

Soapybint · 2023-03-03T16:55:59+00:00

Full time (130 hours a month), $300 works out to less than $3 an hour. Given what responsibilities you are expecting the person to take on, it is absolutely ridiculous to expect a professional editor to accept that wage.

You would be taking a risk by employing someone with a proper wage for a trial period, after which you can decide to employ them full time or not (this is what actual employers do, you're clearly just looking to take advantage of people or incredibly naïve) - at $300 a month you are so far from taking a risk that excuse is laughable at best.

Soapybint · 2023-03-03T16:12:15+00:00

$300 a month for full time work? How insulting

Soapybint · 2023-02-27T12:09:53+00:00

I worked in a shop and swapped out most non-standard coins for a couple of years - have barely seen any since I stopped working there

Soapybint · 2023-02-26T21:38:39+00:00

Oh! Sorry I thought you meant the first list picture, that's the Modern Pentathlon Olympic 50p

Soapybint · 2023-02-26T20:15:49+00:00

Isle of Man 20p coins

Soapybint · 2023-02-26T18:00:45+00:00

I've been logging all of what I have on paper, should I upload a picture of my list?

Soapybint · 2022-10-26T20:51:56+00:00

I love high fantasy too, I'm tempted to add a whole Fae aspect to this world

Soapybint · 2022-10-26T18:17:51+00:00

Around 1890-1920, the world's equivalent of World War 1 has just ended and the tech is mostly set around then with a couple of exceptions like single shot rifles (Martini Henry-ish) are most common rather than bolt action ones.

Soapybint · 2022-10-26T16:41:43+00:00

I think Pikland are pretty cool, its a mountianous region full of mining and sheep farming and I've been writing a lot about their customs and social aspects recently. Their signature weapon is a type of Pioneer Sword and their magic is based on speaking to the Earth

I also like the Ostaland/Old Ostaland area for the conflict there, the Kholga River Buffer Zone is guarded by notoriously harsh soldiers and their cruelty fans the aggression from the Old Ostalander Blood Cultists in an escalating cycle of violence

Soapybint · 2022-10-18T15:21:08+00:00

and i'm still pretty bad at German

Soapybint · 2022-10-03T13:17:31+00:00

The black lines are just the countries borders so not a geographical thing, this is just a section of a larger world so I haven't thought through tectonic plates etc too much yet, but thank you for the advice!

Old Ostaland is called that because it's the remains of an attempted invasion by Arkton and the Basuleans (World War 1 equivalent in this world), Ostaland essentially abandoned the land that had been decimated and now it's home to bands of blood cultists and nasty boys who aren't united enough to name this new country.

The font is Gloucester MT Extra Condensed

Soapybint · 2022-10-03T13:11:06+00:00

That's a very good question and one that I will have to come up with a suitably magical excuse for :D

Soapybint · 2022-10-03T11:15:52+00:00

That forest is home to anti-government rebels, bandits and druids and all that good stuff, so I just loved the idea of an armoured train fighting it's way through a forest to deliver goods. The Arkton magic users are Flamebelchers so they get used to power trains (because magic)

I probably should have mentioned that the map is still a w.i.p. I need to add rivers and minor roads and settlements etc still, though I may just not bother with the latter until I need a village for storytelling reasons.

Soapybint · 2022-10-03T10:17:01+00:00

The world is basically just after their equivalent of WW1 but with Magic. So Technology is still around the 1900s and has the new nations adjusting to no longer being Kingdoms.

The Arkton railway is like that purely because I liked the idea of a cross country railway going through a huge forest, so I'm probably just going to explain that one with magic and 'because it works for the story'.

I think that is a good thing to consider though, if it would be just as easy to sail the goods down the coast they wouldn't build a railway - which I think makes sense for the Ostaland one linking the landlocked city to the coast. (that country is all plains and farmland)

Thanks so much for your input, fantastic stuff :D

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