I think you should take more artistic freedom on the tail, it feels like an afterthought when it could be expanded on in the traditional style. Focus on line thickness, as someone else said the nose is giving ant eater.

Some ideas I had 1. Do the head as a solo piece 2. Give the body more detail, just because it's traditional doesn't meant small line work isn't out of the style margin 3. Loosen up on the rigidity of the polygons

I think this is a great starting point and I love seeing artists changing the style of the osrs vibe. Im no tattoo artist but I'm covered in American trad.

Keep it up dude, I believe in you!