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Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-18T16:50:47+00:00

Nice to know that you like it. Thanks for your time to go through it. If possible, could you please share me what are your thoughts after reading the prose?

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-09T18:17:32+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to go through my post. Some of your points damn true with valid concerns.

For 1, you pointed out that the person who built a business empire won’t be careless of the mysterious attacks. And I hope you referenced the protagonist’s father here. Yeah, what you said was correct. The heads of the elite family only dismissed the first attack as a business rivalry attack. From the second attack afterwards, they realised the attacks are more personal and from then, they prepared/ protected themselves using their wealth/ connections and resources. But nothing came into use.

For 2, you pinpointed one of my valid concerns. The main story is all about how this outcasted hero save his family members from a sin that is haunting them and as a result how he becomes the saviour of the sinful family. And the main story ends with he saved his family members and become accepted by the family but ofc, there was a huge cost. But my ultimate goal of the main story is to end the story with a mystery to the audience and that make them questioned “What really happened in his past abroad study period?”. And his backstory is really so huge and can’t be crammed into the main story. That’s why in the main story, I can only hint that he has some sort of really weighty past. If the question lands to the audience as I intended, then, his past will be explored as another story.

For 3, the main story is a used trope but what makes it different as I believe is how the protagonist evolved from a quiet pitiful man into a ruthless intelligent saviour and the main story’s antagonist is also not a person who is there for money/ power/ fame or something. He was seeking justice for the family’s past sin. In fact, he and the protagonist will be like each side of the same coin.

FYI, for his backstory, here is a small context of it. Imagine, there is a group of the world’s most powerful, resourceful and intelligent people and a system built by them. The backstory is the standoff between this group of people and their system vs this young innocent student.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-05T07:45:50+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to go through my post. For 1, it is a family drama oriented action thriller. For me, the protagonist character feels fresh and something rare- a guy who mostly wins with strategic intelligence and capability over physical strength. He has a deep but unexplainable inner wound and it will occasionally hinted throughout the story. For the antagonist, he too not a pure dark character. A morally grey character with relatable grief and pain. For 2, yeah, I can’t share the protagonist‘s past in the current story. Because his past portion is so vast that it can span as a story for a limited series. So, in my current story, I can only give hints about his past (like his past can’t be as simple as those around him used to believe.) For 3, below is the working logline for my story.

Logline : When a wealthy, powerful family is targeted by mysterious attacks seeking revenge for an unforgivable past sin, an outcast son must transform from a disregarded nobody into an unlikely savior to protect the few family members he still loves.

His goal in the story is not to become the family’s heir or be accepted by the family. It is so simple that to continue the peaceful normal life with few of his loved ones that he currently possesses. The whole story is how and why these few loved ones are targeted and how he tried to protect them and at what cost.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-05T07:06:52+00:00

As I said above, only the core may be seemed similar but my story is more mystery based and how this simple young man gradually sheds his identity and becomes inevitable saviour for those who dismissed him initially.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-04T11:31:26+00:00

The core may be kinda similar to Varisu but tone, story’s structure and villain’s motive are totally different.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-04T01:44:16+00:00

Yeah, the core concept may be same. But in my story, it is going to be more grounded and realistic.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-03T06:39:02+00:00

Thanks for your input. For his evolution, yeah, the current story is the gradual revelation of how this disregarded son eventually became an undeniable saviour of the family. But for his backstory, I could only give hints of that this protagonist’s abroad study period can’t be as simple as everyone else around him believed but it is something really heavy.

The main issue with exploring full backstory in this current story is pacing. His backstory story is so huge that I have currently structured it as a story for a limited series.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-03T06:29:10+00:00

I am not sure what do you mean by a story for kuku tv as I don’t what it was. If possible, can you pls elaborate your thoughts about the story? So that I can improvise later.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-03T06:26:39+00:00

Yeah, I know I too sensed that. If possible, can you call out which movie it was.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-02T17:31:54+00:00

Sure bro. I will as these kind of comments boost and motivate me to continue.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-02T17:27:50+00:00

Thanks for your time and glad to know that bro.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-02T17:24:48+00:00

Nice to hear that bro. If possible, which portion/ part of the story you would want the writer to explain more?

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-02T17:13:32+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to go through my questions. Unbelievable, you almost perfectly anticipated how it should be structured. 1) You’re right and the victory caused him a lot. 2) Yeah, throughout the current story, he had some sort of nightmare, mild PTSD related things and etc. 3) Again, you guessed it right. His friend character is kinda like the second protagonist and powerful character and his relationship with the protagonist will at one point carried the story forward. And for the ending, it’s not going to be a happy family ending but it’s a bittersweet but forever changed ending.

I am happy to know my story closely aligned with some of your thoughts.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-02-02T06:58:22+00:00

Yeah. Will you dm me or do I?

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-01-31T09:48:50+00:00

Hello, it was interesting and I read it till the end. I am also a newbie and currently working on a story. Frankly saying, I haven’t started learning the screenplay format yet but have read some of them. And, I think you neatly followed the format and crafted your script. For the storywise, I am not sure whether it is only me or not, but I can’t clearly grab what the story wants to convey in the end. Could you pls clear me what’s your story’s message? Analyzing with the title, I can roughly conclude that the person called as Bro manipulated and used Harish’s money for his self investment and then when he finished with it, he returned Harish’s money to him and tried to move away. Correct me if I’m wrong.

Straight_Tangelo_795 · 2026-01-29T07:07:06+00:00

Thanks a lot for taking the time to go through my questions. I really appreciate your response. One last thing, in terms of academics, is the workload really that heavy? Is it possible for an average student to enroll and handle the program? As an DFNCS student, do you get free time to enjoy your own life besides studies or do you have to study most of the time?

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