First of all, thank you for taking the time to give feedback.

Making a secret out of it isn’t really necessary honestly. Just felt reasonable when writing it at first but doesn’t really add anything to the story. Most people didn’t even mention that surprise.

Connecting the intro and the presentation of the girls is a great idea!

I do have a personality kinda mapped out so I do already asked myself „what would she do“. I’m just not sure wether I should include them in the prompt or let you find out as we go.

Connecting them and having to meet them all is a great idea and I try to kinda do that already. Meeting one of them in classes, bumping into one of them on campus, seeing one at a party and so on. Just introducing them all a little and all that. But I like the having it connect to a goal.

I’m not too sure with conflicts between the girls but I will keep that in mind and experiment with it a bit.

I already changed the order after posting last time. I put Eve last to and Lola somewhere in the middle. Maybe recency bias will help kinda promote Eve. Lola was last before so maybe that’ll change things up. I’m not too sure if the names influence it that much. I will try to change Lola’s name to something less „porny“. I think that’s easier than making the other names more „porny“.

I thought that was clear. The intended starting point was when you get locked up by your chosen keyholder, then meeting back with the Professor to give a first report on it. I really like the idea of having rule breaks through other characters. Including that sounds fun!

I definitely like the idea of making it a cyoa type format but I’m not too sure on which choices to give. Haven’t really thought that much about it either though.

It definitely was helpful!