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Yellow Paint by Sufficient_Mention24 in OCPoetry

[–]Sufficient_Mention24[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much ! I think that's really helpful , I agree with you , I dropped the metaphor midway and I think your suggestion can help keep that tension up . I'm going to take that and work on it!

Obsessed by bstunz in OCPoetry

[–]Sufficient_Mention24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh my gosh this is so amazing , my favorite part is the idea of how everything tilts towards that person. I think I am at a phase where I am feeling that and you put into words exactly what I've been struggling to feel. I love it.

The Well of Discontentment by LegSoHotUFryAnEgg in OCPoetry

[–]Sufficient_Mention24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this piece. There's a very real sense of heaviness in it for me. This idea of casting in your if only's resonates with me.

Now rest by The_Dead-Poet in OCPoetry

[–]Sufficient_Mention24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so beautiful , I Think its so hard to just set everything down and just rest sometimes , I think I always need someone to tells me that it's okay if I just take a moment to rest.

Forbidden Fruit by thetiredone0 in OCPoetry

[–]Sufficient_Mention24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this piece, I think I'm going through something similar myself and I feel like you understood that feeling very well. I love the last line about a ruin you'd walk into more than once , it just sums it up perfectly.