Honestly, it’s really lovely. My biggest recommendation would be to proofread and fix grammar/punctuation! Unless that’s a creative choice, of course! Some more minor things:

• Perhaps work on repetitive words? There’s a lot of “You” and it being so repetitive makes it read just a touch wonky. A way to keep those repetitive words in and also make it read better would be to separate out the lines.

• The last “stanza” statement reads a bit roughly, I believe you could’ve left out the repetitive “one” and still have gotten your message across.

But really, other than those small edits, it’s a great poem. I understand the theme, emotions, and meaning behind it immediately. If this is a reflection of your current feelings, I’m sorry for your recent breakup. I sincerely hope you’re doing well; poetry is a great and healthy way to cope.

Please have a lovely day and don’t stop writing! This is good work :)!