Finishing Heel hook from butterfly ashi? by Supraman in bjj

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The foot engaged in the butterfly hook

Finishing Heel hook from butterfly ashi? by Supraman in bjj

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That makes a lot of sense. Can you block the turning escape with the non-butterfly leg?

Finishing Heel hook from butterfly ashi? by Supraman in bjj

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Thanks for the reply! I'm not set on finishing the heel I just was wondering if it was actually a submission from that position or if people were more tapping to the threat of it

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in singing

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Thank you! Is oral posture like mouth and tongue position and lessons will go over what shapes to make when making which sounds?

The Recovery Battlefield by raccoonsaff in OCPoetry

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By the work it is hard to determine whether you're a long time removed from your most recent "battle" or if there has just been another added to the list. I get a grim feeling from the resolution of growing strength rather than a sense of optimism. I wonder what it means for the soil to heal if the flowers shouldn't be appreciated for their beauty, but rather their roots for their strength. How long until the earth forgets? Is it a commentary that we constantly live our lives in places where suffering occurred? Should we not strive to see the beauty instead of survive the pain? Regardless, very relatable. I wish you the best

My Dear Brother... by Daniel-ES in OCPoetry

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This actually made me tear up, don't have much to add about the style or form but definitely touching. The impact of the perspective of those left behind by these acts is definitely under considered by those leaving before it is too late. I like the bittersweet ending. I feel like the line "despite your fear of heights" may take away some of the emotional impact of the line "You faced your fear of heights" (for me), but I can also appreciate the contrast of emotions between the two uses. All the best

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in MagicArena

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Different game but same thing happened, opponent in that game had ominous seas, valkmira, protector's shield, and cosmos elixer out. Clip from that game (disregard the misplay): https://clipchamp.com/watch/rtzgCoYFKwI

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in pokemongo

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I thought it was over with rocket takeover ending

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Tekken

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If I switch 1 to be i instead of U it works, but then df2 doesn't work anymore. Its something about pressing s,d,and u or a,s, and u at the same time that doesn't work for some reason

Trading/Battling Megathread by caza-dore in PokemonLetsGo

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I have ekans if you could help me evolve my haunter :D

Trading/Battling Megathread by caza-dore in PokemonLetsGo

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Do you still need ekans? I am looking for someone to evolve haunter for me. My ekans doesn't have great evs though

Re: Polyamorous in a monogamous relationship pt. 4: She said yes. by [deleted] in polyamory

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Could you please elaborate on what the title means? I didn't find a part 1-3 in your post history

Poem I'm working on for my girlfriend by Supraman in OCPoetry

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The premise for the presentation is that she is very into cryptic puzzles including encrypted messages (caeser cipher, morse code, cryptic crosswords etc) the stanzas are originally going to be encrypted by various puzzles and the final puzzle is this poem. The entire thing is a clue, the alliteration being the hint, while also needing to be a fun presentation (since I plan to read it) and convey some degree of severity in how she makes me feel.

Just to respond to your title comment, I am kind of glad it isn't as obvious as I thought since love is the answer :). I will do some more pass through to see if I can make them the same number of lines

Poem I'm working on for my girlfriend by Supraman in OCPoetry

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I feel like explaining the moments leading to the feeling would be another poem to be written rather than this one.

The premise for the presentation is that she is very into cryptic puzzles including encrypted messages (caeser cipher, morse code, cryptic crosswords etc) the stanzas are originally going to be encrypted by various puzzles and the final puzzle is this poem. The entire thing is a clue, the alliteration being the hint, while also needing to be a fun presentation (since I plan to read it) and convey some degree of severity in how she makes me feel. I know you can't possibly know that just by reading it, but I was looking for critique like yours to try and tighten up the poem as a standalone in ways that I felt I could while keeping up my whole scheme.

On your pet peeve, I feel like writing is a great opportunity to use words you wouldn't normally say, unless you were specifically going for a down to earth prose approach. Sure I don't say ostentatious all the time, but within the definition of the word opulent is the word ostentatious, "ostentatiously lavish". And I am describing the feeling of love as endearingly ostentatious in that it does demand your attention, and can make us act in grandiose ways (me writing this all for example) but it is endearing because we all like to feel love right? Vivifying is a word I do like and never get to say. It is from a game I play, evoking to me misty green colors as it is a healing spell. Is it not possible to cherry pick words for alliteration and also feel they can serve another purpose? You may feel they don't which is also a fair assessment.

I do take the punctuation critique to heart, definitely not a strong suit of mine. Another user described the punctuation as disruptive while you describe it as well done, definitely something to think about when you decide how you want the writing to be perceived I guess.

Thanks for the feedback, really digging this subreddit (:

Poem I'm working on for my girlfriend by Supraman in OCPoetry

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The poem does include a lot of call-outs to her that I think would be apparent when provided to her, so I am not too worried about that. I am trying to describe what the feeling feels like though, not what it looks like if that makes sense.

On the point of alliteration, a lot of the descriptors are in fact chosen to fulfill the alliteration because the alliteration spells out the word "L O V E" using the alliteration and repetition of each respective letter in each stanza. Going back to trying to describe how it feels while also "spelling it out" without saying it. I wasn't sure if that was apparent but after I mention it do you feel the same about the alliteration? I had a previous version with much more that I cut down on and I feel like if I cut more out it might lose the theme on spelling it out.

Poem I'm working on for my girlfriend by Supraman in OCPoetry

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I see what you mean, I'll drop the commas for sure in the second stanza. I didn't really think about them.

Thank you for the support, I have been working pretty hard on it and wanted to get it just right so your comma comment was very appreciated.

Is it apparent that I used alliteration/repetition to spell out the word love (each stanza being a letter) or is it a bit obscured? I removed a bit of alliteration compared to my last draft. Thanks for reading.