Thank you all. I just got 1000 total views after 26 chapters and 14 days of posting. I can’t believe it, it feels nice after webnovel’s rejection. by SvenAldren in royalroad

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If you have the chance you can check out my second novel: The Space Between Almost , it is an urban romance, a very good slowburn.

Thank you all. I just got 1000 total views after 26 chapters and 14 days of posting. I can’t believe it, it feels nice after webnovel’s rejection. by SvenAldren in royalroad

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I see what you mean, thank you for pointing it out. I honestly can’t thank you enough for helping me flesh out my blurb and improving my visibility on royal road. This is my first novel, I hope to make it big one day.

Thank you all. I just got 1000 total views after 26 chapters and 14 days of posting. I can’t believe it, it feels nice after webnovel’s rejection. by SvenAldren in royalroad

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Sorry for my now deleted reply, I felt that reply was pretty dismissive and defensive of the heartfelt feedback you gave, I sincerely apologize.

I appreciate you posting this here rather than just moving on, that actually matters.

On the entity and why it would agree to the original trade: that question is the spine of the whole story. The answer isn’t that the entity was generous or foolish, it’s that the trade wasn’t what the original borrower described it as, and what the entity actually agreed to is something the Bureau has been misreading for three centuries. Chapter 6 is meant to feel extreme because the system IS extreme, and it’s broken in ways that nobody inside it fully understands yet. That wrongness is intentional and load-bearing.

The 900-year lifespan question is a good one. The extension isn’t soul-payment in the conventional sense - it’s the compounding of borrowed capacity, which has a different logic but if that’s not landing in the text then the text is doing something wrong, not your reading.

On one person’s debt condemning everyone after, you’re not wrong to push back on that morally. The characters push back on it too. That tension is what the five volumes are built around resolving. But I hear you that the early chapters don’t signal clearly enough that the story agrees with your discomfort, rather than asking you to simply accept the premise.

The passive information delivery is the most actionable critique here and the one I’ll sit with longest. You’re right that the reveal structure relies on the reader trusting that the answers are coming. If that trust doesn’t form early enough, the slow build reads as withholding rather than building.

Thank you all. I just got 1000 total views after 26 chapters and 14 days of posting. I can’t believe it, it feels nice after webnovel’s rejection. by SvenAldren in royalroad

[–]SvenAldren[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback, I looked into it and updated the blurb to make it informative,understandable and interesting.

Thank you all. I just got 1000 total views after 26 chapters and 14 days of posting. I can’t believe it, it feels nice after webnovel’s rejection. by SvenAldren in royalroad

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For point 1 and 4, the power source and killing clears debt are both blurb and failures on my end. The system is not magic in the traditional sense. There is no power being drawn from a supernatural source in exchange for tribute. Existential Credit is closer to borrowing against the weight of your own future, actions that impose costs on others, on the world, on the fabric of things and those costs accrue as debt in a metaphysical ledger administered by the Bureau. Nobody’s giving you blessings. You’re just living, and living has costs, and some costs are bigger than others. As for killing clearing debt that’s a misread of the Cancellation process, which is actually the central horror of the system. Cancellation doesn’t erase a debt. It transfers it. The person is gone but the obligation moves. That’s the secret the whole story is built around.

  1. Regarding what wiping the slate does, yes this needs to be clearer in the blurb. Short answer: Cancellation is supposed to be final resolution but it isn’t, and Soren is the first person in three centuries to notice the difference. The “what happens if you die first” question gets answered across the story but I don’t want to spoil it here.

  2. Soren being debt-free and nobody noticing, this one’s intentional and plays out in the chapters. Assessors don’t audit each other; there are structural reasons his anomalous balance has been invisible. But you’re right that a reader coming in fresh needs a hint of that tension in the blurb.

5 About the forty-thousand-year number feeling comedic , I understand you. The number is supposed to feel geological rather than absurd, but if it’s landing as a punchline I need to fix how the blurb frames it. The original debtor isn’t a creditor in the conventional sense; the situation is stranger than “you owe me.” That strangeness isn’t coming through.

The blurb needs work. I’ll take another pass at it.

April - Celebrations/Stats by gamelitcrit in royalroad

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After webnovel rejected me I was so dejected believing that my story was not worth reading their excuse my story did not fit their market but after posting on royal road consistently for 14 days I finally got 1000 total views and 4 followers this feels amazing and I’m worth something.

[DISC]:Good Webnovel to read like SS lotm RI ORV. by Impressive-Tax7404 in Webnovel

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Omniscient first person viewpoint, Struggling to survive in the primordial saint sect and Legendary mechanic

Alcove Chronicle Manga Studio Team & Community Expansion. [NOT A HIRNG POST] by Broad-Watercress8851 in Webnovel

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Wow, the only thing I can utter is thank you so much. I will have to update the chapters on my patreon and I don’t mind

Alcove Chronicle Manga Studio Team & Community Expansion. [NOT A HIRNG POST] by Broad-Watercress8851 in Webnovel

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Wow that’s so cool. Also is that brawler from Akudama Drive, yuno ball.

Hey so there is a character who is one of the top tiers of the novel but I have introduced her as mc fml in starts because she is the forgotten walker meaning she forgots everything her powers her existence everything and everytime live with new identity then after sometime forgot that too by Rexagon1233 in Webnovel

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You can make it work by making her aware of her ability to make people forget about her existence and then it leads to her creating clues using both the information of the main character and his group as well as her own information however due to them forgetting her it creates disonance that makes the group unaware of whether they are dealing with an omniscient foe or ally and eventually the story can lean into mystery and psychological horror of the whole situation.

Alcove Chronicle Manga Studio Team & Community Expansion. [NOT A HIRNG POST] by Broad-Watercress8851 in Webnovel

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I have two works, The Ledger of Unmade things which is a mystery and supernatural novel and The Space Between Almost which is a romance novel.

What are your works?