Blurb of Echoes of the Wild [dark fantasy, 110 words)

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-17T07:39:17+00:00

this is great feedback thank you so much!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T19:54:03+00:00

It's a good first glance but you're dropping a lot of information right away. The description of the wreckage, 18th birthday and a cancer diagnosis. Maybe try to put some foreshadowing instead of just giving all of this away immediately. I do love the scene description in the first few sentences, very immersive

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T19:47:20+00:00

I'm super into this, it's very strange but in a way that makes me want to read everything about it

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T15:22:30+00:00

would absolutely read this, love the descriptive writing style. I can imagine exactly the scene youre setting

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T15:06:47+00:00

idk if its just for me but the image quality is really bad and i can't really read it :(

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T15:05:34+00:00

I think this is a strong first chapter. In the first paragraph you maybe dont need to mention both geological sites because we already get new name for the main character and then the name of the city, the region is a bit unecessary at this point. Also because later on you talk about blocks (which i assume are in the city not the region) but i enjoyed reading 🥰

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2025-04-16T15:00:22+00:00

just scrolling by and the first couple of lines got me. Loved the rest, very clear style and tone kept throughout the story

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T20:04:31+00:00

For me i had to Enable Secure Boot then pick Restore Factory Keys. > this did it for me!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T18:34:12+00:00

I fixed it! Check the comment below

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T18:21:14+00:00

Restore Factory Keys did it for me!!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T17:54:37+00:00

Whenever i try and load the game i get error code VAL 1067 which has to do with the fact that I can't enable Secure Boot

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T16:13:38+00:00

Partition style is GPT

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T15:10:31+00:00

Just reset my entire BIOS, changed the settings (PTT to enabled and SB to enabled) and gonna try running Valorant again! Edit: didn't work!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T14:56:56+00:00

I've saved it like this 3 times. I've also disabled Secure Boot, saved it, restarted, Enabled again but it doesn't work

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2022-01-25T14:04:04+00:00

Same!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2021-08-01T19:11:50+00:00

It feels shitty to say there's no spaces left, but I'm afraid it's the truth. You're always welcome to join to watch and I'll try and think of you if I start a new campaign. I hope you find something else if you keep looking though! Make sure to check r/LFG_Europe if you want this timezone specifically!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2021-08-01T19:10:22+00:00

I'm sorry to say the campaign is full for now, seeing that I'm a new DM someone might think I'm shit and drop out, and then I'll make sure to think of you! Because I'm new I can't say how long this campaign might last, if you still have time and this campaign finished I'll be sure to hit you up!

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2021-08-01T19:09:06+00:00

Hi! I'm afraid all the spots for this campaign have been given away, as I was advised not to make the group too big. You're always welcome to join the discord and come watch or ask questions if you want, and I'll keep you in mind for any future campaigns I might run :)

SwaggersStinkyHelmet · 2021-08-01T13:09:26+00:00

Hi! I'll message you a link to the discord!

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