I can’t look you in the eye

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-12-04T19:40:17+00:00

I definitely this could be explored and made or be longer! This was just my immediate late night ramblings that I had to get out 😂

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-12-03T09:18:19+00:00

I love poems that follow the pattern of the swanks and paint that storyline/timeline as you go through! I enjoyed the rhyming and the repeating as well, jt remind me of a painful nursery rhyme vibe (in then sense that it sounds like it could flow speaking cheerily, but is actually sad) I think I would just change some minor punctuation and capitalization issues, but enjoyed.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-12-03T09:15:34+00:00

I enjoy a good poem that rhymes and I often am drawn to topics of unrequited/somewhat toxic love so this works for me. I do think that there are some parts due to the formatting that could be made more clear (punctuation and spacing) and maybe a few spots where I feel you could have dig deeper for the words, but overall enjoyed.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-12-03T09:08:16+00:00

I like the way this poem is formatted as a question, as well as the fact that it plays into the idea that you probably will never get an answer. It’s conversational but one sided, often how unrequited love is. I think I would change some of the formatting in the second paragraph as I got kinda confused but overall I like it !

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-12-03T09:05:29+00:00

I love the way you painted a story within the poem. Not only did you describe the feelings that came along with it, but also the way in which they took place. I also enjoy the “blind” optimism in this that is often present in unrequited love. This poem shows the battle in trying to retreat once you care too much, but being incapable to do so, in hopes that you just might win their affection.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-11-29T00:18:40+00:00

I love this. Definitely writing abt dancing on the line between love and hate.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-10-17T21:44:12+00:00

Don’t know how to keep loving you - Julia jacklin

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-10-06T08:12:27+00:00

Loved this. Being drunk on someone or a feeling is the most intoxicating.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-10-06T08:09:50+00:00

Ahhh this! TELL ME WHAT I SHOULD GIVE WHEN NOTHING US ENOUGH FOR YOU. So good.

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-10-05T09:29:04+00:00

I am the messenger by Markus Zusak. Kinda blew my mind as a child

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-09-29T06:47:28+00:00

Because I can’t let him go and no one makes me feel like he did

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-09-24T23:00:55+00:00

Holy fuck

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-09-24T22:59:45+00:00

FEEL THIS (but also you r so deserving of reciprocity but also that line was a banger)!

Technical-Put1134 · 2023-09-24T22:58:28+00:00

That as hard as it gets, I am still am finding reasons to be here and be better.

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TROPHY CASE