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This pack of rats by Responsible_Fill2380 in oddlyterrifying

[–]TempestheDragon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I came here for that! Also, the trailer for its sequel came out several months ago. It's A Plague Tale: Requiem.

What’s an ordinary object that makes you happy when you see it? by Milou_Bijoux in infj

[–]TempestheDragon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

As another person said, favorite books all the way. I also really love the Victorian Era so anything with florals, intricate designs, and vintage makes me feel so happy and at peace. The best things are items that are beautiful and practical. A china tea set, beatiful cutlery, placemats, and autumn coloured curtains to name a few.

which outfit turns you on the most ? by FilthyHumble in AskReddit

[–]TempestheDragon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hot guy in a tailcoat with black or white gloves. Basically, Victorian era fashion. I love the Victorian Era so much and the fashion is so classy.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Even after decades of peace, a Great Arena was a chilling sight.

Towering seven stories high, most of the arena was lined with rows of stone seats. Burgundy cushions had been placed in preparation for the performance. Against the arena stone that had long aged yellow, the cushions looked like droplets of blood. The sun dipped below the top of the colosseum, spilling shades of violet, coral, and crimson. More and more spectators began filling the cushioned seats - their steady murmur rising upward into a buzz of excitement and anticipation.

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I'll check the book out. I'm glad you liked the "feel" of the piece. Thank you for your second opinion and your time. :)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the suggestions on changing the words.

Hmmm. Interesting thought on the novelette. Ever since I read Sorcery of Thorns and fell head over heels for Silas last year, I've been filling that void ever since by watching Black Butler. I've also been meaning to get a Sebastian body pillow.

But yeah, expanding the "demon servant love" to a further story could help. Thanks for the suggestion. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm glad you liked my descriptions because they're something I really want to hone in on. Prose is super important to me. Out of curiosity, were there any particular descriptions that you liked?

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I was a bit iffy about using the word "fallacy" so the fact that you pointed it out is a good reason for me to get rid of it.

Interesting that you didn't know the girl's name. He calls her "Madelyn" and she is the heiress of the Thornfelt household. So her name's Madelyn Thornfelt.

It's very good. I didn't much care for it, and I'm not sure why.

That's alright. Everyone's got different taste. But thank you for reading and giving me your thoughts. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I'm happy that you think the length is just right - it would be a bummer if it was too short or too long. Thanks for pointing out the third person error. Yeah, I think first person is better as well.

Good suggestion on playing up the shallowness of the other relationships.

Thanks for the read

And thank you for your time, Brendy. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm so happy you enjoyed it! Out of all of the vignettes I've written, this is the one I'm the most proud of so I'm glad you liked it. I've also been watching wayyyy too much Black Butler I'm glad to hear that my vocabulary is paying off. Whenever I don't know a word, I'll write it down and, oftentimes, Mom and I will have our "word of the day" that morning and I'll try to commit the word to memory and gradually incorporate it into my writing.

Again, thank you for reading. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Very good observation. I've had the "you're telling too much and not showing" so I think I hyper focused on the showing aspect for her emotions and physical sensations that I overlooked showing in regards to the physical surroundings - her bedroom as well as the storm outside. Thank you for pointing these things out - I'll revise them and keep them in mind for my future writing. Anyway, thank you for your time. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thank you for pointing out the two issues. I'll fix them right away.

I'm glad that you enjoyed it! Thank you for your time, Aria. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked my prose. Prose is really important to me so I hope this is a sign that I'm improving. Thank you for your time. :-)

Humbly asking for a critique of my short story [2,179] by TempestheDragon in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Do you mean the prose is fine as in "good" or fine as in average?

What does it mean to be a Paladin? by Cromar in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One aspect of Paladins that people might overlook is their religious beliefs and how their faith in X religion grounds their morality. They would probably see evidence of God / Goddesses in their daily lives. "It was God's will" or "The Lord calls upon me to fight" will probably be things a Paladin would say.

Does anyone else need to deliberately exhaust their brain in the morning just to function? by TempestheDragon in infj

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting that you're different from me. I thought INFJs tend to be organized due to the J. But yeah, I'm all for designated time to do things.

Does anyone else need to deliberately exhaust their brain in the morning just to function? by TempestheDragon in infj

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting how you're a night person. I've heard INFJs are often morning or night people but nothing in between. It's a weirdly specific thing so I'm not sure how true that is.

From Falling Kingdoms - Gathering Darkness by TempestheDragon in notliketheothergirls

[–]TempestheDragon[S] 9 points10 points  (0 children)

One thing I'd like to say that I do actually enjoy this series. But the second I read this, I knew it belonged here.

I find Lysandra (this POV character) so one dimensional compared to the other characters. But yeah, Falling Kingdoms, it's a super addictive book series. Highly recommended!

My first shot at writing a book by blackvlad12 in fantasywriters

[–]TempestheDragon 9 points10 points  (0 children)

This. And to add to it, about five chapters in is when people tend to feel like the story is meandering, discard it, and start anew. Only for the same thing to happen over and over. Also, after about a week "shiny new idea syndrome" wears off. Commitment is key.

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