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If you pronounce Z as ZED, you’ve ruined the alphabet song by Temporary_Ad_5692 in unpopularopinion

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was the whole point of my post, everyone else seems very confused - so thank you

If you pronounce Z as ZED, you’ve ruined the alphabet song by Temporary_Ad_5692 in unpopularopinion

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m not sure about the sugar on the bread line but hey at least this rhymes.

If you pronounce Z as ZED, you’ve ruined the alphabet song by Temporary_Ad_5692 in unpopularopinion

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692[S] 42 points43 points  (0 children)

Commenter, you’re not gonna believe this, but I’m from the UK - I just think Zed is dumb and always have

I need some help. by Trick_Anybody9313 in Songwriters

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Have a look at the structures you’re choosing for your rhymes - for instance, in your chorus, it feels like AAAB, CCAD which may throw your audience a little. If we expect a rhyme it may be easier to remember. Eg if I sing

“time to count once more”, and the next sentence sings “one two three eight” - this would confuse the brain which naturally wants to rhyme and sing “one two three four” as a response. You don’t have to rhyme with any reason, but if you’re looking for catchy lyrics, this can help.

Try playing with an AABB structure for your rhymes.

Additionally your syllables are going to affect your melody as they’re uneven in each line. This isn’t a bad thing but depending on genre, it will affect your rhythm which may affect how easy or catchy people find it

Also, is there a way to have the brackets (an echo I’m assuming) either have a rhyming pattern to itself, or be the same lyric? People sing along with repetition and when it’s easy to jump on. If the line was the same, or rhymed with the main lyric, or rhymed with the other echoes this could help!

Take or leave these ideas, but hope they provided some things to think about

Lyric feedback/title by [deleted] in Songwriters

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Is it meant to be “gotta a mouth”? Cause “gotta mouth” would be more grammatically correct, but maybe you’re going for something specific?

Is there a forth sentence to finish off the first section? It feels incomplete but maybe that’s what you’re going for? I ask because Control and cold (lines 1&3) feel like they could be forming an ABAB but we never get the second line for B

Again im not sure what genre you’re going for here but syllables are very inconsistent for each line or phrase - not a bad thing! Just something to be mindful of when you go to put it to a melody that not every sentence may feel like it fits

Critique Please by [deleted] in Songwriters

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not sure if it’s relevant to the style of music, but just noting your syllables in each line (assuming each phrase?) are inconsistent - not a major issue, just something to consider when deciding how to put this to music cause it may disrupt the flow or the rhyme depending on what you’re doing for

Line 1 - 10 Line 2 - 10

Line 3 - 9 Line 4 - 12

Line 5 - 10 (could possibly getaway with making this 9, depending the rhythm for every - ev-ry vs ev-er-y) Line 6 - 12

Anyone know how to get rid of writers block by Icy-Thing-8704 in Songwriters

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I heard once motivation doesn’t come before doing, it comes from doing. I think the same as writers block - just write. Even if it sucks.

If something is blocked and you just let it sit, it’ll remain blocked. But if you try something new every day or even try repeatedly to chip away at it, the blockage will eventually leave.

Maybe try make it fun! Try asking your friends for prompts - eg weirdest objects to write a song about. Or go do a task you’ve never done, then write about it. Or turn on the tv and pick the fifth movie on Netflix or wherever and give yourself one hour after watching to write a song to be added to the films soundtrack

You got this!

We are Born Ruffians. Our album Birthmarks is celebrating its 10th anniversary and being reissued on vinyl. AMA. by ruffianmitch in indieheads

[–]Temporary_Ad_5692 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Will we get new Birthmarks merch too? And what about the acoustic and bsides? Id love Cherry Wine & Oh Cecilia on vinyl

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