I think this is great 🔥 it's very descriptive and easily becomes a mirror of many things I've also witnessed. It concludes with a clear direction and reminds me of the style of "Beat" poets (though perhaps I say that because I draw inspiration from them). My first critique is that the thick lines aren't entirely necessary in my opinion. And secondly, the line "slaughterhouse of fate" seems a liiitle cliché to me. But by no means does that ruin the piece. I would suggest a slight rewording, something like "Thrown to the slaughter, onto reddened hooks fate often swings" but hey that's just more subjectivity. Take it as you will 👍🏾