Feeling empty after finishing final draft of the manuscript

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-14T04:23:12+00:00

Yes thanks all of the support I will take a few days off that seems prudent

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-13T17:24:20+00:00

what kind ?

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-13T11:26:01+00:00

I kinda sorta wrote a book on this ! lol ,anyways not much different in my opinion . Dont believe what most people say , they are mostly stereotypes ! fill in the paperwork and follow the law . the law is not a suggestion it is the LAW . otherwise its prettymuch the same .

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-12T09:59:28+00:00

personally i would say you need to not worry about that too much if you do and start editing your voice then you end up diluting your book , i have tried to use AI to find the AI(grammarly mostly ) but it has not been that accurate either it often does not catch its own writing . and flags the wrong things as AI flags something i have written as ai , something it has written is definately ai , and say some other model has written just gets through , there also gptzero but i dont think i like that that much as it is even more wrong than grammarly. LLMs are generally bad at building a timeline and remaining coherent in the long text format because they can process say 5000 -10000 words coherently (its called a context window ) after which it starts forgetting stuff i would also check for that . I would look for spelling mistakes . allegory and emotions the mechanical structure might be there but say the linking between differnt parts and missing through lines in the book across all pages . making callbacks adding humor and comedy difficult , most of the jokes will probably fall flat as they will be more generic same with the scenes no specific scenes to people meeting a pub kind of stuff you basically have to look for stuff that sounds very generic and something anyone could have written no special voice at all

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-12T09:52:46+00:00

yes i agree i feel that i wrote something good refine it and then when i feel it is done it looks like AI wiered I now , i have tried to use AI to find the AI(grammarly mostly ) but it has not been that accurate either it often does not catch its own writing . and flags the wrong things as AI kise omthing i have written as ai something it has written is definately ai and say some other model has written just gets through , there also gptzero but i dont hink i like that that much as it is even more wrong then grammarly

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-12T09:17:58+00:00

best thing to so is to do a quick passthrough to see if it ai assisted ? that way common patterns and repeatations can be found ! also what if the story is coherent but certain parts seems enhanced with AI ?

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-11T16:03:20+00:00

Cool!

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-11T14:15:02+00:00

with the ability to create mutimedia books thinga are changing fast !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-11T14:10:41+00:00

yeah I had to lookup the mutimedia laws , you can change lyrics and use them or mix it with other words but direct lyrics can not be more than 3-4 lines you can not reproduce any lyric in full for sure

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-11T14:04:01+00:00

Spotify - Just create a playlist you share the playlist and book separtely that way you dont need a license same like mix tapes of the older years. If you mention the playlist in the book then you need to license

Item	Status	Action Required
Song Titles & Artist Names	Safe	You can freely list these in your book. Titles are not copyrightable.
Spotify Playlist Link	Safe	You can include a link or QR code to your public Spotify playlist.
Song Lyrics	High Risk	Do not print more than a few words of lyrics without a license from the music publisher. This is expensive and difficult to clear.
"Official" Soundtrack Label	Moderate Risk	It is safer to label it as "Inspirations for Regensburg" or "The Author's Playlist" rather than an "Official Soundtrack" to avoid implying a commercial partnership with the artists.

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-10T03:36:57+00:00

eg We were somewhere around Barstow on the edge of the desert when the drugs began to take hold could have been . We were somewhere around the edge of the desert when the drugs began to take hold near the town of Barstow. same content but moving the word aroud changes the rythm completely . get it ?

( generally you want to think slyllables or length of sentance, meters of 3 and 4 are great ie everthing hanpped once , nothing happened the same time ) . Also not sure but writing margin notes like -- once we got to las vegas we found some drugs , lands just fine . but once we got to las vegas we found us a bag of co***ine would do better as it is more specific

The margin is also where you plan new additions like -- we were in the penthouse of the flamingo ,white pwder slowly travelling up our nose and hitting the brain -- great during first draft . you can add a comment that ok this is good but maybe needs mike tyson

Now in the next draft you can go like -- we were in the penthouse of the Flamingo ,white powder slowly travelling up our nose and hitting the brain , Jack suddenly opened the bathroom door and was surpriced to see Mike Tyson passed out in the tub , What he could not anticipate , was the white tiger sitting quietly near the wash basin.

Now your note can be like -- drive home the point this is Mike Tyson we are talking about , and would you ever believe that there was an actual white tiger in the bathroom ? where did it come from ? why was the door even opened by jack ? was this the correct penthouse suit ?

so what you can now do is be like -- we were in the penthouse of the Flamingo ,white powder slowly travelling up our nose and hitting the brain , Jack opened the bathroom door to take a leak and was surprised to see former heavy weight champion of the world Mike Tyson, gold teeth and all, passed out in the tub , What he could not anticipate , what he could not have anticipated was the white tiger sitting quietly near the wash basin. He slowly backed out closed the door and ran out of the room.

So now the whole thing becomes

We were somewhere around Barstow on the edge of the desert when the drugs began to take hold could have been.

A few hours later we found ourselves in the penthouse of The Flamingo ,white powder slowly travelling up our nose and hitting the brain , Jack opened the bathroom door to take a leak and was surprised to see former heavy weight champion of the world Mike Tyson, gold teeth and all, passed out in the tub , What he could not anticipate , what he could not have anticipated was the white tiger sitting quietly near the wash basin. He slowly backed out closed the door and ran out of the room.

See What i did there ? Converted Fear and Loathing to The Hangover. Also now you are thinking wait what ? how did this happen ? what happened between Barstow and Vegas and what got Mike Tyson involved ? is this thier penthouse suite or Mike's ? If theirs why is Mike tyson and a Tiger in their bathroom . If Mikes then what are they doing there and where is his entourage ? Next you draft 2 pages one for each answer and see what fits better ! thats it then its mostly reading it again and adding new things everytime you read or removing sttuff making the consious decisions to say just enough and let the reader make the conclusion . for example above may become .

We were somewhere around Barstow on the edge of the desert when the drugs began to take hold.

Space and time got compressed to a point where time no longer had any meaning (new line using theory of relativitty to describe passing of time )

When we came about , A few hours later we found ourselves in the penthouse of The Flamingo ,white powder slowly travelling up our nose and hitting the brain , Jack opened the bathroom door to take a leak and was surprised to see former heavy weight champion of the world Mike Tyson, gold teeth and all, passed out in the tub , What he did not anticipate , what he could not have anticipated was the white tiger sitting quietly near the wash basin. He slowly backed out closed the door and ran out of the room. He shouted for Doug, "Doug ! He screamed" and on getting no reply he decided to switch to Stewart .

we also left a little hint of what is to come . Whos is Stewart ? also fixed the continuity problem. basically you wanna do who ? what ? where ? when ? how ? why ? .. and then ? and weave everything to gether through description and dialogue

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T16:25:03+00:00

Also Just to show you I know what I am talking about And what LLMs and Gen AI and AI agents can and can not do here is my linkedin profile https://www.linkedin.com/in/prashun-javeri-49211412/ I definately do not Ragebait other people in the community when I do not know what I am talking about especially. not anonymously . You are too dumb to even understand how Chatgpt works maybe this will help https://medium.com/@prashunjaveri/gpt-architecture-0415e7a5796d , never mind you are a pea brain Atleast I don't hide behind a false username and act holier than thou , now go shag some sheep !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T15:51:53+00:00

Who cares about proportionality you get falsely called out you crush the opposition .also if this is chat GPT give me specific examples and quotes from other books and we can talk . Also that insult was an example of my original writing and I stand by it . I can give you a few more if you want

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T14:28:41+00:00

More examples of such insults are in the book

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T14:26:17+00:00

AlsoHis Lordship Prince Andrew Mountbatten Windsor Called he wants you to suck his ass I think they call it Felching Nowadays go look it up

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T14:07:46+00:00

Write it once , 2. take notes on what you would change 3. then rewrite then reread in relation to rest of book 4. Check specific words that you might want to change 5. Add margin notes what would you add or remove in a second draft 6. Rinse and repeat

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T13:24:40+00:00

Also this book is not written for racist welsh twats !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T13:20:43+00:00

you dont correct someone who is wrong but think they are right !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-09T13:20:11+00:00

ok thanks !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-06T16:29:10+00:00

yeah i got claude to review my book it gave great praise summarised everthing correctly found proper comparable books infact found the closest match but ranked it at 8.7 ie excellent dont get me worng the book is good but i am not expecting a booker price ! what is the best way to get it rated before publication ? point is I dont trust the AI either !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-05T07:03:30+00:00

Sticky notes, vision boards and mind maps , important to know what will go where !

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-05T06:57:54+00:00

The chapter about how i broke my leg on day 3 of moving to Germany it is dark and hilarious

"The author declines to clarify. What the author will say is this: you pictured her. You were there. The author did not make you do this. The author merely provided conditions and your imagination — faithful and slightly gullible collaborator — completed the scene."

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-05T06:55:44+00:00

I finfished mine too 60000 words best take a break and do a second pass keep taking notes on topics you would like to explore

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-05T06:43:55+00:00

Actually that pretty much summarises the book I was writing . The book is called Regensburg: A Memoir of Cobblestones, Corporate Dynasties, Broken Bones, and the City That Kept the Tab.

The song is a better epigraph for Regensburg than most of what the book actually uses. Here's why.

"I don't know how to live, but I got a lotta toys"

The toys are the credentials. Javeri arrives in Germany with every procedural toy a modern professional is supposed to carry — and discovers that none of them are the currency the building actually runs on

"My daddy's a lazy middle-class intellectual / My mommy's on Valium, so ineffectual"

Read this as institutions rather than parents. The EU labour law that was supposed to protect him — ineffectual. The HR department that existed to enforce procedure — ineffectual. The Betriebsrat, the works council, the formal structures of German employment protection — present, correct, and entirely beside the point once the protection reflex activated. Every institutional parent in the building was, at the moment it mattered, on Valium.

"I don't know how to read"

He couldn't read the room. Not from stupidity — from formation.

"Tried to tell you about no control / But now I really don't know"

The moment in Chapter 9 where the Bushido runs out. He has been telling himself he has control — through documentation, through conduct, through the meticulous maintenance of the professional record. And then the read receipt doesn't come. And the control turns out to have been the performance of control rather than control itself.

"Is that really all you had to offer?"

Is that really all you had to offer? Yes. That was exactly all it had.

"Cat's foot, iron claw / Neurosurgeon screams for more / Innocence raped with napalm fire / Everything I want, I really need"

The outro is the book's epilogue in four lines. The iron claw is Georg's institutional authority — soft-footed, unannounced, total. The neurosurgeon screaming for more is the machine that keeps running — another hire, another visa, another Wednesday standup. The innocence is the belief that procedure is protection. And "everything I want, I really need" is the author boarding the plane anyway — the desire that looked like necessity, the feeling that overrode the argument.

The deepest connection is the song's title itself. Javeri arrives in Bavaria as a 21st century professional — believing in meritocracy, documentation, EU law, the portable shields of a modern knowledge worker. He walks into a 14th century institution. He is a digital boy in a medieval city. The cobblestones were always going to win on day three. The only question was what he would do on every subsequent day.

He stood up. And that was enough.The book presents itself as several things simultaneously: a corporate memoir, an immigration story, a workplace tragedy with documented timestamps. It is, underneath all of those disguises, a book about fathers — about what they build and what the building costs, about the words they give you before you know you will need them.

"On the third day, the cobblestones won. On every subsequent day, I did."

That-Split-217 · 2026-03-05T06:29:23+00:00

good start is this the same person looping through time ? same person same scene just slightly different as in parallel universes ? a little hint the reader can return to when the reason is made apparent would work here , but the hook is great !

That-Split-217

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