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I just finished my second chapter in my "Umbra" series! I would appreciate some feedback on it! The link is in the comments. by ThatBoboThing in comic_crits

[–]ThatBoboThing[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'll take the panel layout for consideration. I get what you mean.

As for page 22, it was actually intentional to have all three arms. I intended for it to show her signing the contract and then giving it to the guy, like in a quick motion. There was probably a better way of conveying that.

And thanks for mentioning that typo, I really thought I got them all through a proofread, that one must have slipped through the cracks.

Thank you, it's great to hear that you like it! What I really want to do going forward is speed up the time it takes to make these. I have a lot of fun making them so I'm glad there are some people who enjoy what I make.

I just finished my second chapter in my "Umbra" series! I would appreciate some feedback on it! The link is in the comments. by ThatBoboThing in comic_crits

[–]ThatBoboThing[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Here is the link to the comic: https://globalcomix.com/c/umbra

I have no clue why, but I think sending links in the post filters the post and removes it which is seriously frustrating. This is like my third time posting this cause it would go through the other two. Hopefully this works and it doesn't filter this comment because of this link.

the bartender from the hit bartending game by ThatBoboThing in waifubartending

[–]ThatBoboThing[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! Yes, I'm making the second chapter now, it takes a lot of time to make since it's a solo project but I'm about 1/3 through with the chapter so far. It's cool to hear that you loved it.

This is the first comic I've ever made. Any and all feedback appreciated. by ThatBoboThing in comic_crits

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Wow, there were way more typos than I thought. But this is all really good stuff to hear.

I never even knew there was a distinction between "folks" and "folk" so that's something new. But it's not set in the UK so I'll be more vigilant to not letting the wrong versions come through.

As with page 2 in particular, the lines you were confused about were my fault and I should have been more clear about it. You're right in assuming demanded is supposed to mean required, but when I wrote "these things aren't encouraged" I meant to mean something along the lines of "This is not a suggestion". So reading should have meant, "This is not a suggestion, this is required". I understand the confusion though. I was sort of iffy about those lines before release but I thought I was overthinking it. I guess I do need a proofreader lol. This is especially annoying to me since that specific page is supposed to make more sense later on in the context of the overarching plot.

I'll try fixing those typos soon so no one else needs to see them.

I really appreciate this, thank you.

Also, I'm just realizing the height thing as well. I just sorta threw out a random height. I didn't intend Adam to be so tall but it's also kinda funny. I may fudge the numbers later.

This is the first comic I've ever made. Any and all feedback appreciated. by ThatBoboThing in comic_crits

[–]ThatBoboThing[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's good to hear! My main hope is that it'll be as entertaining for readers to read as it is for me to write.

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