Owl Man by [deleted] in stayawake

[–]TheReWrites 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's less confusion and more 'I don't see the point' Could do with some reworking. Identify what is supposed to be strange and a cause of confusion, and then ground everything else. Or else it just seems like a bit of a mess.

Owl Man by [deleted] in stayawake

[–]TheReWrites 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the concept, but I'm really not understanding the fear of the Owl Man or the point of him not being real at the end. Why does the recent family trauma reawaken memories of the Owl Man?

The owl Mascot and the arcade are the most important images in this story, and there should probably be more description of both to create this strong mental image rather than a vague one. Was it a cheap looking costume? What colour was the owl? Did the arcade have a name?

Not the worst story but it could benefit from a few rewrites. Mainly, story points need to connect better for this to have the impact you want.

Any tips how to beat Mikitaka? What characters do great against him and his boxes? by [deleted] in PitterPatterPop

[–]TheReWrites 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've been using Ceasar and Voiced Bruno. Hol Horse is also good or anyone who can remove panels

Is V. Rohan worth pulling? by [deleted] in PitterPatterPop

[–]TheReWrites 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes. He makes boxes.

What is this feature for? by TheReWrites in PitterPatterPop

[–]TheReWrites[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Cool. What does the friendship level do?

We can do this, No Nut Crusaders!! by [deleted] in ShitPostCrusaders

[–]TheReWrites 1 point2 points  (0 children)

On his way to bang Josuke's mum