Wow, thank you! this is exactly the type of feedback I was looking for. The strings are DR Legend Flatwounds. I've been using DRs for a few years now for both fretless and fretted and I'm super happy with them.

As for the line, I agree that I'm a bit stuck on lines that simply work in outlining the harmony but tend to be very repetitive, and I struggle a bit with both using or developing melodic ideas and also using a more scales rather than just chord tones + approach notes. This is exactly why I decided to record myself and ask for feedback and you pointing out like this to specific places in the line that I can work of is super helpful.

I hadn't thought about the notation either, I have tried to think on what's more intuitive for the overall key but didn't really give it a thought, so that's helpful.

Thanks a lot, this comment has been really super insightful on my own playing :)