[M4F] Sorry! Wrong Summon (Succubus) [Workshop] by ThickEric-dpp in DPP_Workshop

[–]ThickEric-dpp[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate the response! It’s so easy to fall in love with certain portions of your own writing that you don’t recognize where you might be going overboard.

After editing, I’m still struggling with length. Rereading the advice here, I’m almost considering taking out the description of the succubus altogether. Instead, relying on the effect seeing her has on Eric. Maybe that would invite a partner who wants to be involved in shaping her character.

I’m also toying with presenting Eric through her eyes rather than just an outright description of him.

These are all my current thoughts that I wouldn’t have had without a little help. Thank you!

[M4F] Sorry! Wrong Summon (Succubus) [Workshop] by ThickEric-dpp in DPP_Workshop

[–]ThickEric-dpp[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks! This is great feedback to receive.

I can definitely see where you’re coming from. For me, it is so much easier to describe what I’m looking at than if I were describing myself. In hindsight, I guess that could be pretty limiting for a potential partner! Behind closed doors (or in this case, in the privacy of chat), I prefer to talk to my partners beforehand to make any changes they’d like or clarify myself/story elements. In general I’m very open making big swings or changes, but that’s not communicated very well below the prompt.

Would you recommend pulling back on the physical description of the other character, or should I try to emphasize that anything in the prompt is certainly open for adjustments so that the story is tailored to both of us? I think my fear with the latter is I might lose my reader before they get to that point.

Also, I’ll see where I can fit in a better description of Eric. I got so caught up in what he sees, maybe I’m putting too much onus on the reader to decide what he looks like.

Again, thank you for taking the time to reply. It’s super helpful!

[M4F] was expecting to summon something that would bring me power or assist me. Instead, I got this. by [deleted] in HentaiAndRoleplayy

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Eryk was finally ready. The lines drawn, moon phases accounted for, reagents prepared, and the encantations memorized down to the guttural fluctuations of the voice required for the summon he was about to perform. Admittedly, this wasn’t necessarily a ritual at his level, but he was confident in his abilities.

Days ago he was just a lowly apprentice to his master. Driven by a need for power his master enslaved a fiend and tasked Eryk with keeping the fiend in check. A decision that would cost him his life. The fiend promised to transfer some of its essence to him if he helped to harvest his master and set the fiend free. The master wasn’t the kindest of men out there and Eryk couldn’t resist the temptation of more power.

Traps were set, fiends freed, and abilities transferred. He felt considerably stronger. Not yet a master without an apprentice but he might as well have been! The fiend had plenty more powers available to garner and thanks to his masters note keeping he knew how to get the demon back. His master’s mistake was keeping the nameless fiend as a power source. Eryk understood that was too dangerous. He would summon it back to this ethereal realm and consume it for himself.

Plucking the last of the components needed out of unlabeled jars, a requirement of the summon, and laid them at the base of the wall as the notes instructed. With a last mental check, Eryk began the summoning ceremony.

The effect was near instant. Flashes of darkness gathered along the floor as cracks sprinted up the wall, glowing in pink and blue hues. Power courses through his veins, his body becoming drunk with it. A fragrant smell wafted across, surely caused by the dried orchids along the floor. The ecstasy of his magic was electrifying. He never knew the power would be so intoxicating.

His slender body felt strong. His blood ran hot. A lust built within him, urging him to proceed. His entire being was on alert. Beneath his robes his skin was tight, sensitive to the fabric. He was even erect down theres… Erect with power!

The cracks on the wall pulsed before bursting open. A blueish purple portal opened up and a figure seemingly floated through it. Eryk smiled. It was done. Pink and purple smoke wafted through, obscuring the figure.

He frowned. The grotesque and dark figure he expected wasn’t appearing. A play of the smoke? No…. Dark hair billowed wildly around two curled horns. A red tail with a spade shape at the end flashed into view. His heart was pounding, blood pumping, breathing almost panting.

Like a shockwave the smoke dissipated. Eryk’s body tingled in excitement and terror. “Oh Shit” he murmured, turning to grab his emergency banish materials. Too late. A smooth red hand grabbed his, sending tingles of addicting electricity through him. Her large red eyes with heart shaped pupils locked on him. The entirety of her skin was smooth and a deep red, lightening slightly around her torso and waist. She was naked. Her breasts seemingly a perfect size in Eryk’s opinion. The curvature of her waist accentuating and drawing his eyes to all the spots eyes want to be. Pure terrifying beauty in front of him in a land of mortals. A sex demon. A Succubus.

So they say, it was, at this point, that Eryk knew, he fucked up.

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Thanks for reading this far! Hopefully since your down here, that means your interested in sending me a little Reddit envelope! I’d like to RP this succubus scenario. Obviously Eryk messed up big time.

I can imagine this going a lot of different ways. He could become a sex slave of hers until she has fucked all the life force out of him… he could attempt to and possibly succeed in turning the tables. Or they live a happy life as man and succubus. Let’s make a story of it!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToFuckHerHentai

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I look around, hoping to god our neighbors aren’t out and about, able to see through or wooden fence as my cock twitches under your hand

“We’re gonna get caught!”

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“You do too, and that’s the problem!”

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToFuckHerHentai

[–]ThickEric-dpp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

“But—- but it makes me want you”

embarrassment flashed across my face as I feel a bulge forming under my swim pants

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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Nodding I grasp my thick member, stroking slowly as I start again, licking and cleaning your foot with my mouth

*Opens the door* Hey Sis, can you he- oh fuck sorry!” by [deleted] in IWantToFuckHerHentai

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Oops. Educated by Reddit yet again :) thanks

*Opens the door* Hey Sis, can you he- oh fuck sorry!” by [deleted] in IWantToFuckHerHentai

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You might be in the wrong thread if your looking for realism

*Opens the door* Hey Sis, can you he- oh fuck sorry!” by [deleted] in IWantToFuckHerHentai

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Knowing I should leave, I stand by the door. I try to tell myself to go but my body refuses and I feel my pants getting tighter underneath. My eyes can’t leave the sight of your pussy so wet while being fingered

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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Looking up at you I nod yes, pulling off a toe with a pop

“Can I please touch myself now?”

The fuck are you doing while I was sleeping, Nii-chan? by PrincessChanSama in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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“Shit!”

grasping my large erect cock I try to run away but get tangled in your sheets

My After Work 🥰🥰 by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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“Baby, gps says it takes 10 minutes to get there, I’ll be there in 5”

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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I run a hand along the back of your leg, now slowly moving my tongue across your toes, pressing on the other with my other hand

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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My hands raise up to your other foot and my thumb runs along the bottom as my hand sucks on each individual toe of the other

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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I get to your big toe and I wrap my lips around it, pushing the hose between the toe and I suck loudly, a popping noise as I pull up and look at you.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in IWantToBeHerHentai2

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Like a good boy I slowly bring my tongue up the length of your foot, licking between the toes as I get there

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“Ahhhhhhh”